Thanks for the shoutout, I really appreciate it.

When I saw you'd updated, I was pretty stoked. It was a great chapter and I can't wait for the next.

Hoping this review finds you well. I'm the "Malachite" half of Syncronized Malachite, so the comments and opinions expressed herein are purely from my side and in no way reflect on Syncronis. I just wanted to clarify that up front, and also to thank you for reccomending our "Time Of The Month" so much. Now, let me get to the good stuff.

I've got to start by saying that this is a fantastic chapter to the story, and I would argue that this one is actually the high water mark, at least, so far. This is not to downplay the third chapter or the events with Luna that transpired. Rather, I think that what makes this latest entry the best is the depth of the psychology at play, the realizations that run separately through Lincoln and Luan's minds, the things they don't wish to understand, that frighten them, and perhaps best of all, how they deal with them.

There is a common theme of love in this story, and the attachment that the girls have to their only brother. Indeed, the feelings run so deep that they manifest themselves in these sinful, physical ways. I notice that so many of the reviews you've received on this story focus on the destruction of Lincoln that is happening, and yes, that is definitely an aspect of this story, no question. However, I think what is often missed is the inverse of that, the awakening that each sister goes through in these twists, their own personal liberations from feelings that have been bottled up inside, lying dormant. Luan comes into touch with them and as such, understands that there is a very special bond between the ten sisters and their only brother. In their own ways, each of them is trying to make Lincoln understand that, and from their perspectives, he is the one that is wrong--not because he doesn't care for them, but that he doesn't accept their gifts. What this chapter told me was that there is something wrong--something far beyond the obvious "OMG Lincoln's older sisters are raping him! Indeed, Lincoln himself is guilty in all of this too, becausehe gives into their needs. Never does Lincoln stand up for himself and say no, does he refuse to be a willing participant. He tries to make his participation in the coupling passive, tries not to allow himself to derive pleasure from it, and hates himself afterward for having negative feelings towards them. I don't say this to condone abuse or rape, but rather to provide perspective. Along this theme, it is noticeable in each chapter that something passes between Lori and each new sibling to conquer Lincoln. I submit that, in the future, you should revisit the original Lori chapter and expand on it. There is some first class non-consensual sex in that chapter, but as the story goes on, it also begs to show us Lori's breakdown. What happened to move Lori to a place where she was okay with forcing herself on Lincoln, what was it inside of her that snapped, that made breaking the boy preferrable to wearing him down and getting him to give in. Indeed, the same thing has happened to all of them. Different roads are taken, but they always end up at the same destination.

The little nuances in this chapter are utterly amazing, and the symbolism is palpable. The way that the sex is described calls to mind something more real than fantasy. It's the little things tha are remembered--anyone can just write about thrusting and moaning and sucking and licking and such--but the little touches, like the way Luan strokes Lincoln's legs, drawing designs on his thighs with her thumbs, and the way she lets her hair down in a sign of utter surrender to something she knows deep down to be the truth, even if it is painful, destructive, wrong...it is who she is. The love that she tries to express to the boy with her words and her actions is crucial to her frame of mind. Luncoln observes their coupling as something she needs, in order to make a lie true. There are severe elements of this, I agree, but one thing I found with Luan, and indeed is common through each sister that has taken the boy, is that this is the most natural way for them to express those feelings. Words are too poor an excuse for the affection they each share for their only brother--something more than familial, romantic, or even carnal. Each of them wants to hold onto the boy, to have a little part of him they can call their own.I feel that Luan and Lynn don't get to let their hair down enough, and to see it physically happen here is something both sexy in its design and symbolic in its deployment.

The mental state we find Luan in post-coitus is equally as thrilling as her sexcapade with Lincoln. Beginning with the ubridled satisfaction she feels from the sex, far beyond simple physical pleasure and rather the fulfillment of a deep, burning need she hadn't previously realized was there, to see her sitting in the kitchen, disheveled, trying and failing to pick up her pieces as she comes to grips with the harsh reality of things--more than just the consequences of having joined her older sisters in the torture of their only brother, but the knowledge that there is something between all of them, something special, something magical, something frightening and damning...and Lincoln wants no part of it. It's destroying him, and all Luan can do is lie to herself and pretend that everything is all right, it's just a joke she's in on, reciting one-liners to herself like some kind of personal rosary, closing her eyes and shutting her ears to everything else. In a manner, she's no different than Lincoln. There's a question hanging in the air over what is wrong and what is right. Again, it is certainly not "right" for Lincoln to be raped, but neither is it okay for him to pretend that he is okay with it. The long and short of things is that Lincoln has something that they each need, a special bond and affection he would deprive them of. This, of course, is his right--no one has the right to force themselves on anyone else. However, it is also a "needs of the many outweigh the needs of the few, or the one" situation. Luan seemingly knows this now, all too well, and her pain seems to come less from her own sin, but rather the knowledge that she would do it again, they all would.  

Lynn is obviously the next to go. You're a fantastic writer, but I can't help but pre-emptively share my thoughts about the athletic sister. While Lynn is strikingly tomboyish, she has a feminine side she hides. She best advertises this through her hair. As an athlete, it's quite normal for many girls to go with a short hairdo, keeping their hair out of their eyes.  Lynn eschews this, preferring to keep her hair long and instead tying it up in a ponytail. She also seems to know something of doing nail care as we've seen her helping other sisters with that in episodes. I don't think this is to say that Lynn is some kind of closeted girly-girl, however, I think she has a softer side beneath her competitive exterior--she'd want to be asked on a date, she just wouldn't want to go to some fancy restaurant and wear a dress. She's much more comfortable sitting in a booth a the Burpin' Burger with her significant other. Lynn is also the closest to Lincoln in age. It's rather unlikely she can even remember a time that Lincoln wasn't in her life, cheering for her. This is purely a personal thing, but I can honestly see Lynn thinking of herself as Lincoln's "wife," that is, the one who will be there when the dust settles, the one who would want an actual relationship with him (this would also extend to Lucy, but I'll get into it another time or this review will be chapter-length). Lynn's competitive nature would mean that other sisters muscling in on her territory would actually hurt her. Lynn would not want Lincoln looking at other girls--something that would already make her nervous because she's not the prettiest or sexiest of her sisters by a longshot. This might drive her to try to take on far too much to prove herself, running the belief that she can be a better lover than her sisters. Of course I am just a humble reader of this fic and co-author of my own separate work, so I am in no way making demands, merely suggestions and interpretations.

I think this finally brings me down to the end of it. I can only hope that my review fills you with the confidence you need to know that you've done something right, because you've done it in spades. Don't hesitate, please continue and move forwards. And, as a fan of our work, Time Of The Month, I can assure you it isn't abandoned and we've got a good twenty pages already for the next chapter. It will come, but we like our chapters to be long and meaningful, not unlike yours, and to advance a story to its strongest. Thank you for writing, and please keep telling this story. If you feel like discussing anything I've mentioned here, I would love to do so. You can PM me here or on regular FFN (Lord Malachite). I also possess a degree in English and would happily assist you with editing or proofreading if you feel like you're missing the mark, looking for a better way to say something or convey an idea/emotion/action, or what have you.

Heartbreakingly perfect.

I have read a lot of depressing stories, but this one is truly fantastic. I agree with many other reviewers, I have to see what happens to Lincoln in the end. Total mindbreak and predation on the others after Lynn Jr.? Or somehow each one having a reason to take advantage of him? I hope we get some more insight into his mind either way. (And Lucy will be a blast to read I'm sure, the little creep.)

You have done an awesome job creating a scenario for each sister after Lori, and I am impressed by the realistic, if stretched for the plot sake, motivations you have given them. I would totally say Luan is an even better chapter than Luna, though. In fact, I really must "incest." ;)

I did sort of expect a reference to how Lynn Sr.'s promotion hinges on the family's "wholesome" image. Maybe that is more important to Lynn Jr. due to honoring her namesake?

Are the older sisters still taking advantage of him? I feel like Luna must get drunk out of guilt and then go back for more, but it is hard to tell if the one alone time was it. Maybe a little bit more detail on that or separating out the sister's emotions when the group reacts would help. I can't see guilt-wracked Luna fawning over her father or eagerly hitting the mall. Unless she isn't feeling so guilty?

I love all your little touches about the sisters' relationships with one another, they add so much to the plot and tone.

The smut is well written too, hard to ask for more detail when that isn't really the focus, but it is suitably erotic and tragic. 

This is one of those once in half-a-decade stories that gets me to review. This site is littered with half-finished works, and I really hope you can push through to the end. Few stories I have been so thoroughly intrigued by have been completed, but you have the benefit of only having so many sister's to write a chapter about before ending. (The thought of a "Chapter Ten" is terrifying. Unless a time skip is involved . . . broken Lincoln never leaves home?)

Keep on writing, I look forward to the next chapter!

Welp, just when I thought it couldn't get any more depressing...

In all seriousness though, great chapter. The way things are developing, I can only see this situation ending in one or two ways: a bittersweet ending where the older sisters are punished for what they've done but as a result Lincoln and the Loud family are forever broken. Or a complete downer ending where no one is punished, and Lincoln becomes the sisters permanent fucktoy.

At the very least, I hope Lori gets whats coming to her for starting this whole mess.

Seeing this updated made my day! Don't knock yourself either, it was a great chapter. My one question is this: after Lynn Jr., Lincoln will be all out of older siblings, will the abuse continue on down with the younger siblings? I sure hope Linc doesn't have some sort of total mental breakdown and become abusive toward his younger sisters that would be horrible :^)

Wow. Very deep, very depressing. I noticed some mechanical errors (clunky phrasing, etc), but the story itself was great. You know you’re reading good fiction when you find yourself genuinely sympathizing with the characters. I felt terrible for Lincoln. Poor kid. We put him through hell on this site. I was hoping Luna would do the right thing (I didn’t think she would), and when she didn’t, I was extremely disappointed in her. Great job. Please continue.

This is the kid of story I want to read. Not because of the erotic stuff, but for the plot, if there is a plot. I'm waiting to see if it will stop here or if Lincoln will go all way down all his sisters in a horrorific destruction of his family.

As it looks right now, Lincoln seems to have started to think he is monstrous for actually enjoying what he's forced to do. Even more, he might think he caused all this because of being a boy and living so close with three girls that are women already. So he probably is starting to think that this is how it should be and that it is his role to satitsfy her sisters, even if he doesn't like the idea.

I just need to know how this continues.

I'm really loving how dark and cruel this story is. Poor Lincoln, getting brutalized by the people he loves most, and I like how each one so far has their own reasons for why they do it, ultimately tied to their familial love for him.

I'd love to see how this story progresses. Will the other sisters end up raping him too? Maybe you can have him so emotionally damaged that he snaps and ends up raping one of them. That be a great way to shake things up a bit. Maybe the parents could get involved...

Anyway, I hope you continue the story. So many siblings, so little time.

This story desperately needs chapters for Luan and Lynn. You are doing an amazing job of bringing real heart and pathos to the characters, the truths about who they really are, and how broken Lincoln is inside. I really want to see the love and the dark side that the comedian and the athlete will shower upon Lincoln and I think you could so some highly astounding work. This story is too wonderful to die, please keep it up!

Really good story i think Lincoln is broken i hope you keep it going im curious on what will happen to him in the end

This is the first story I read in the Loud fics that is both realistic and really erotic. The fic is so good that I signed up to adult-fanfic just to say this. 



P.S. Will there be a chapter on Luan?

Her lesson learn,  she will not.

I wonder who's the next sister to emotionally scar Lincoln.

This is extremely well written.

i kinda hope it'll have a happy ending after you go through them all or an orgy.

but I really just hope you continue this.