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Reviews for Star's Crossed Lovers

By : GeorgeGlass
  • From RandomReviewer on August 20, 2016

    The plot thickens... 0o0


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  • From FairySlayer on July 24, 2016

    (Disclaimer: I'm the beta reader.)

    SPOILERS!

    Chapter 5 was quite a great sneaky-sneak attack, most of all for being so fun while the conflicts rolled in and then abated with the kind of fun ease we associate with the show. I love the "cultural misunderstanding," both in practice of how it would be creepy to only give the drops to their dates and also Oskar's understanding; more importantly, no way Marco would have been able to wait one second longer than needed to get the spiking issue aired out with Jackie.

    However it also made for a wonderful conflict at first, and really sad how Marco stormed off (or well…) and Star's mixture of guilt & anger fueling her until she had that important realization about her parents. Well played, Mr. Glass.

    When Tom appeared I thought he'd have been responsible or at least aware of how the evening had went, but seeing his plan (and rather crude but sexy way of testing) was a lot of fun. Also, since Boner's first appearance I can't help but smile every time he's in a scene, and not just because of his name either. Nice escalation of what a dick Tom is when Ruby explains why she doesn't care for him anymore.

    I like how Mrs. Diaz "caught" Star and Marco together, and so much better that she agreed with her husband when he observed the exact same superior Mewnian logic that Star had come up with the first night they stayed together. Also, I had a proud moment when Marco caught himself while explaining to Jackie that he and Star are [i]best[/i] friends. The next smooth writing move was mentioning Janna's tone that Star can never quite interpret as the crushing girl confronted Star about her lie.

    Finally, once we were all set up to enjoy a nice party and see what other shenanigans could happen there, whether by Janna or Tom [b]BAM![/b] you remind us that, oh yeah, there are monsters who want the wand and are willing to hurt humans to get it. Perfect cliffhanger. Thanks.


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  • From ANON - on July 10, 2016

    I wonder if date rape is a thing on Mewni? :D Great chapter, you have a terrific grasp on the characters personalities. Very in-character.


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  • From FairySlayer on July 09, 2016

    SPOILERS!

    Chapter 4 was a nice bit of fun, with a nice move forward in the story and some really good kissing plus boobage to be had. Star getting miffed at Marco's comment that they're just friends was a cute aside and makes clear that Star's feelings for Marco are deeper than her (perhaps hormonally-driven) lust for Oskar. Marco may have realized the mistake in communication over his words, but I don't think he yet understands the full impact of her feelings – even if they aren't intended to be romantic. (Yet? ;))

    It did seem suspicious that the kids' inhibitions were eased after drinking the glowberry punch, but I'd wondered if it was the other-dimension version of alcohol or something more intentional. Now it's a big oopsie for Star to explain herself to Marco, who will probably have at least three angst-ridden feelings on the matter.

    However my biggest concern is what Star may have to do in order to keep her lie to Janna going. Stealing bodies is probably a bit beyond the scope, so whatever she has in mind is probably a lot more fun.

    Thanks for another fun installation. I really look forward to what's next.


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  • From GrayNeko on July 08, 2016

    Awww shit son that got intense in a fantastic way. I have to say I can't get enough of Star and Marco talking about their relationship, it reminds me of something Star is going to reveal in my own piece. And I'm digging Grandpa Rogelio so far, his wisdom is both gross and insightful. The club scene was great and I have to say I was surprised with how far you were taking the action once it started, it seemed to clash with the pacing of the earlier chapters but that ending made it all so clear and I can't wait to see the fallout.


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  • From GrayNeko on June 16, 2016
    I really enjoy the pacing you've got going on, nothing feels rushed or forced. Loved Tom's and Janna's scenes, can't wait to see how an aggressively forward girl like Janna will throw a wrench into the main duo's plans, and the humor between Tom and poor Boner was fantastic. Also I love the title of the third chapter, sounds like it could be the title of a rock song.
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  • From ANON - Christopher on June 16, 2016
    Very good new story. I hope that Janna will be let down easy or Star will find someone else for Marco because it is SO obvious that Janna is into him in the show.
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  • From FairySlayer on June 14, 2016
    Disclaimer: I'm the proofreader, so all typos and such are my fault. :)

    For starters, I like the little recap of Marco's and Star's love-live situations, both to ease into the discussion and also provide enough background for those who aren't as familiar with the series. It strikes me a little that many teenagers fret almost non-stop over how to appeal those of the other sex, yet at the same time they could pretty much write a book on what they've picked up about various types of people among their own gender. If they just used some of that observational power… Yet on the other hand, there's still a hint of the blind leading the blind as both have their confidence shaken here and there. However it's awesome how they both keep perking each-other up.

    So it seems to be working, and I won't complain. :)

    Setting up the plan and negotiating the number of parts was perfectly in-character and rather adorable on both kids' parts. It ran rather smoothly, thanks to the small number of entries; the last item though is great for proving that this is going to be one hell of a sexy story. Thank goodness Mewni is a bit more liberal about sex. :)

    Also, Star's line “If you need to measure it, it’s not awesome.” still cracks me up. :lol:

    Then the restless night and all that deliciously sexy talk was fantastic, and it's cute that Star is not above teasing Marco a little bit as she gets him all flustered.

    The goings-on of chapter two played out well with each accomplishing their first checklist items so well. Marco was terrific for calming Star down after she jumped ahead on the list – especially being The List Guy, but it's clear that he cares more for Star's happiness than anything else. Perhaps even getting with Jackie Lynn, if it came to that; at the same time, I wonder if Star would also care more about her best friend succeeding. This could make for some interesting complications; Janna too seems like she'll be sticking her face into their business and raising havoc. Niiiiice. :)

    The subtlety of "that face" was pretty cool, though it was good you pointed it out for people like me. Also, giving us the pronunciation of Rogelio was clever and just a really nice thing to do.

    Finally though, another night with Marco and Star together in her room turned out rather nicely. She's such a carefree yet considerate young woman. I'm glad that for all of Marco's fretting he was able to fall asleep without ruminating on the situation too much. Let's just hope the puppies don't start crawling around inside his pajama bottoms. (Or maybe that's just what Star will claim happened… okay, maybe not in this story. ;))

    So thanks for all the fun, and I'm really looking forward to seeing how this adventure goes. Thanks for sharing.
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  • From ANON - RandomReviewer on June 08, 2016
    Ooooh another Star vs story, sign me up! The last story you did for Star vs was great, I'm definitely excited for more!
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  • From thatguywiththeface on June 07, 2016
    Chapter 1 This is really good so far. Once again I love how in character you make Star and Marco feel. This was a good place to start. Some titillating images without going to far early on. Looking forward to more
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  • From GrayNeko on June 06, 2016
    It's good to finally get a chance to read this, I've been looking forward to it ever since you were asking for help with the title in the forums(once again, glad to be of help).

    I'm loving the start of this, from the wingman fistbump to Star constantly bringing up her parent's sex life. I really enjoy how casual and comfortable they are around each other, even as things got awkward. As always you capture the aspects of the show that make it great just perfectly. I look forward to more.
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