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From DebbieCync on March 31, 2017
I like the depth and the twists and turns you've added to what could have been a simple porn story,

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From ANON - Roscoe on December 23, 2016
Brilliant!!
Bravo!!
Encore??
More??

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From ANON - Saintmichael95 on March 26, 2016
Aww man, this story is fucking awesome! I hope it's updated soon!!
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From ANON - Kenju on May 15, 2015
Soooo it's beenawhile mate and you're fans are still here waiting for you lol. Really hope you havent given up on this fic, its truely the first GOOD Family Guy fic thats ever been put out there :(

Also really want to see Stewie return for a showdown of the brains lol
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From ANON - Kenju on June 01, 2014
Hey nice to see you are still alive and kicking mate, we were starting to get worried around here lol. I said it before and I'll say it again, this is the only decent Family Guy fanfic thats out there right now and the thought of it discontinuing is rather frightening to say the least.

This chapter was pretty good all around, we got to learn more about the test group Chris was a part of and we are actually seeing the foundation of the future getting laid...in more ways than one lol. I was a little sad with the introduction of yet another OC rather than a canon character, of which there are plenty, but her role and situation were well done and called for. I was surprised and quite pleased to see that Chris's actions didnt go completly unnoticed and he hasnt exactly gotten off scott free here. The witness of course isnt a threat to him, which could be good or bad, blackmail is an old and well know trope after all.

I also found it to be rather funny that even though some time has past since Quagmire's death, Chris STILL hasnt gotten around to cleaning his car. Carwash is what? $15? $5 if you use a do it yourself one? Kids got a good heart and he's gotten smarter, but he's still lazy as hell when it comes to some things lol

As for Chris's grandfather getting included, thats going to be a major issue I can already see. The man cares about one thing and one thing only, and thats money. Chris will need to speak his language to get through to him. His point that you make more money treating people for something for the rest of their lives than curing them is 100% so Chris needs to find a way to overcome the loss of income. About the only way I can think to do that would be to make it a vaccine that everyone is given when they are young and need booster shots for the rest of their lives. It wouldnt make as much money per person as cancer treatment does, but it would be a much larger customer base so that might make it more profitable in the end lol

I look foward to seeing where you take this story in the future, and I'm still holding out hope that Mrs Lockheart will be joining the cast lol. Keep up the good work!
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From ANON - Anon on May 01, 2014
this is great I want more
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From ANON - Kenju on March 29, 2014
Sorry its taken me so long to review, but real life is a pain lol

Lets see, what to say about these two chapters. Well first of all things are taking an intresting twist with the medication Chris was testing along with those others. I had noticed Chris acting a little odd over the previous chapter, now we know why. The funny thing though is that despite how horrible Chris's actions were in chapter 6, they arent completly...alien to the series if you think about it. Every member of that family has killed at least one person, but this chapter really made Chris seem a lot like Stewie. Both of them having the same parents it makes sense they would have some similar traits to them. Boost Chris's IQ and add paranoia and you have an older Stewie lol

That aside, these chapters continued the trend you have had going since you stated this story. While out there in some ways, it wouldnt have seemed that unusual for an episode of Family Guy, even Glenn's inglorious death was perfectly fitting.

Still, I will admit that I'm going to miss him. You made him a designated villian in this story, but without him a good deal of the humor from the series is gone :(

As for what happens next, Chris might have been better off calling the cops after 'seeing Glenn dead hangng from the fan' the next morning. He'd pass the house so it wouldnt be unusual, and whoever is in the basement might have a reward for their rescue. Chris missed out that time. That aside I look foward to seeing where you go with this, what Chris's next move will be and what beauties he'll be claiming as his own.

Keep up the good work mate,this is a great story and I look foward to the next chapter :)
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From Christopher11 on February 15, 2014
So, he murdered Quagmire for basically no reason? When he could have easily called the police and gotten him sent to prison?

Chris is becoming evil in this story and it is not a good twist to the story.
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From ANON - superlink on February 05, 2014
great story im looking forward to reading future chapters
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From ANON - Kenju on January 21, 2014
Sorry dude my bad lol, it was pretty late when I wrote that review and was reading the story as it was up to that point. I must have not seen the bit about Stewie and Brian only gone visiting, I thought they died since they hadn�ft been mentioned in the story aside from that one bit.

As for dealing with Brian, it wouldn�ft be that difficult actually to keep him away from Lois. If you have the DVDs, we learned when her husband was killed that Jilian is pregnant, likewise she is a friend of the family. While Brian is gone just have Chris go see her and invite her to live with them. When Brian and Stewie return, Chris point out that Brian has a chance with her now by helping while she is pregnant, and then helping take care of her kid after she gives birth. Brian�fs distracted from Lois and there is another hottie about lol

That aside there is a very specific reason why everyone has been so kind and generous to you and your story mate. Look around, seriously look around at what Family Guy fanfiction there is out there. Here, FF, WWOAEC, H-Foundry, the list goes on and on, you can count the number of GOOD fics on one hand. 90% of whats out there is Stewie/Brian. You are currently writing one of the very few het fics for the series, and not only that you are writing a *very* good fic dude. And if/when you do write Lara in, it will be her first appearance in a fanfic, you�fll be the first to ever write her so that�fs something else to look forward to (though I was hoping she�fd stick around, I�fll take whatever I can get for that pairing). I haven�ft caught but a few little things here and there wrong with it, mostly grammar issues, but the spelling and form is great and the characters are in character according to the series for the most part. That�fs why everyone has been giving you the props you have so deserved. Keep it up!

As for this chapter, it was interesting, you have presented some new developments and introduced more characters from the series. Bonnie and Joe was *perfect* from start to finish, I heard Joe�fs voice at the �eYou bastard!�f moment I have to admit lol. But the issues in Joe and Bonnie�fs marriage weren�ft simply played for laughs, you treated it as a serious matter and the interactions between Chris and Joe really did ring with the series canon, Joe getting a little help/advice but still ending up the butt monkey. I look forward to seeing where you take things from here mate, this story is turning out to be very interesting indeed.

I did have a few thoughts, but I don�ft want to fill up your reviews with junk lol. I could contact you via e-mail if you have that posted on your authors profile though.
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From ANON - shrike8675309 on January 19, 2014
it is simple Stewie and Brian are on the road to the Multiverse.
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From ANON - Kenju on December 29, 2013
Well I have to say this is quite a bit different than what you'd expect to find, and I mean that in a good way. While this story is quite a bit outlandish and random in its own way, I think it fits perfectly with the world of Family Guy, adding its own brand of crazy while keeping in line with the series. Kinda shame so many of the main cast were killed off before anything could start, I mean I understand Peter had to die for things to start, but Stewie and Brian to? Oh well, still plenty ahead to look foward to, I cant wait to see what happens when Lois's dear daddy catches wind of whats happened lol

About the only thing I could ask for is that Lana Lockhart get pulled into things ;) Lois keeps saying Chris needs to find a girl aside from herself, and can think of none better, especially with Chris having some money on his side now lol

Keep up the good work man, I look foward to seeing where this story takes us.
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From snake1980 on December 28, 2013
great job on the story so far man. looking forward to the next and future chapters of this story. have to wait and see if u add any more girls in this story in the future? keep up the great work
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From HenshinDaisuke on December 22, 2013
Great story, really looking forward to more.
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From ANON - Frank Blackness on November 26, 2013
This is really good man, looking forwards to seeing where it goes
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