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Reviews for Zygerrian Triumvate; the Rescues of Obi-Wan Kenobi

By : Jade_Max

From serendip on November 16, 2012
Have I told you I love this? Because I love it :) The tension builds so beautifully throughout and then the end between Obi and Aala is just explosive. The intensity is written perfectly, along with they way you describe them - made for each other, physically and in every way. I love the writing and I love being able to come back and read anytime, of which I do. Good times, this was.
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From laloga13 on July 19, 2012
And so it ends...

Really, I couldn't think of a better ending! Okay, so I'm *totally* biased when it comes to my OCs, but you really outdid yourself here and pulled out all the stops for Obi's rescue. *Loved* that Kali was the one who Anakin turned to, and I *really* loved how she wound up solving the "problem" of how to make the queen think she and Obi had spent the night together! It was wonderful and sweet to see Aala and Obi, and Kali & Stone all together. Well, not *together,* but you know. ;)

Great, great job with Kali and Obi-Wan. Loved their Force-talk banter, and their familiarity; they're each a little swayed by the strength of the connection they share, but ultimately they are committed to their current loves, and make wonderful friends. :) Great use of Kali's musical skills to infiltrate the palace...and the dance. Loved. The. Dance. Obi-Wan is *quite* rhythmic, isn't he? ;)Loved her repeated insistence of "trust me, Ben," because the farther along we got into the story, the more outrageous her plan seemed, such that even I was starting to raise my brows...

But of course, it was all wonderful and lovely! Stonewall was there, (btw, loved this: "Stonewall, it seemed, couldn�t have cared less for the audience for he was already loosening the fastenings on Kali�s clothing." Sigh. Is it weird that I love reading my OCs from another writer's POV?), and so was Aala; all was right with the world. Totally took me by surprise when she showed up, but it was fantastic. As always, from you!

Great job with this entire series! :D

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From serendip on July 18, 2012
Wow! She literally owns him forever :D Haha, that is something she may never let him live down. "I *own* you Obi-Wan Kenobi." :-D

The beginning was wonderful, Kali always has a mischievous plan up her sleeve and certainly handles the situation well. The teasing between them was fun, and I liked the dance. And then Aala showing up to play and give all the comfort he could possibly need, the poor guy! It was just awesome. Everything is so present - their love and passion and need for each other after the times they just miss each other so much. Aala really wasted no time getting naked! :D it was perfectly naughty and sweet. Absolutely yummy. And the end was so achingly romantic! It really showed how much they love each other and are meant to be together. Just lovely. You did so awesome with this, I adore it. I've been hoping since you said you were tweaking it... that a certain someone might come ;-) Thank you, thank you! Thank you
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From NakedClones on June 03, 2012
I have to admit it is a little weird to read about loving somebody so... furry. For some reason, I got this image of just being very unshaved. Does that make me xenophobic? Funny because I don't get a weird vibe when I imagine Ahsoka and Rex, or Barriss and Cody, or Bly and Secura. Maybe it is just a fur thing. But, anyway, as far as furry interactions, this one was very well done. Once again, your imagination for the cultures and traditions of other people is just terrific. You and Queen have such a talent when it comes to this!

Obi certainly handled the situation...er... masterfully. While he was doing his duty, he did seem to enjoy himself along the way. So, hopefully, it wasn't too much of a burden on his part. He is a great negotiator, after all. Now, why didn't Anakin handle the situation so well when he was in a similiar position? He could have had Rex, Obi Wan and Ahsoka and the slaves freed much, much sooner! He could learn a few things from dear Obi Wan!
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From laloga13 on June 03, 2012
Smexy as hell! Loved Obi's cool control throughout this...he's a smooth operator indeed. ;) "You wish release; I want them released. It�s a simple trade.�

His and Miraj's banter was absolutely fantastic - such a pleasure (no pun intended!) to read, and I love that he used the broad spectrum of his skills (pun *intended*) to achieve his ends.

Also loved the "mark" exchange...amazing work, Jade! So, *so* well-done! :D
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From serendip on June 03, 2012
Pretty impressive that Obi-Wan took all the time necessary to learn every detail he might need to know about the Zygerrians... it seemed to serve him *very* well, and he certainly got what he needed. The definition of Jedi efficiency and success. The way he commanded the situation and demanded her body's reactions was pretty hot. Very Sexy Obi, the golden shorts make me giggle :-) I wonder who was at the door...
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From serendip on May 20, 2012
**There were, he reflected, far, far worse ways to be rescued.**

Lol, indeed. Very naughty and spicy! Obi-Wan seems to be *very* good with his hands :D I did like that even though she was so cold and just using him 'using the situation to her advantage' he couldn't help employ the the full ability of his skills and the force while he was shackled to pleasure her. He is good at what he does :-)
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From NakedClones on May 20, 2012
Best foot rub ever!

Wow. As someone who just loves a good foot rub, I must say that this qualified as one of the best foot rubs in history. The description of the foot rub turned into something much much more was just... whoa. Loved the way it became a very intimate moment yet they still kept things somewhat hidden from the prying eyes of the queen so that they could keep the heat between the two of them. Also, loved the way the bounty hunter used her feet to pull Obi Wan free of his very tight shorts, but not a lot, just a little bit. Just a little tease. The whole story was just a tease, which made it so much fun to read. So well done, and so much fun.

Even the ending where the bounty hunter received her release but Obi Wan was left unsated... does this mean there is going to be more between this particular pairing?
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From laloga13 on May 20, 2012
First of all, I really *really* love the idea of Ahsoka "buying" all the slaves, which will alert the Jedi Council to where they're being held. Very nice addition!

Now, to the...erm, "meat" of the story. (Yes, I love my horrible puns! :P)

Folte and Ob seem to have a rather colorful history and I love the hints that we get of their past times together. Also loved the almost-but-not-quite demonstration that Obi had to put on so that their cover wouldn't be blown; there's something very scintillating about that *almost seen* factor. It's also a little bit degrading - not overmuch, but enough to keep the theme of this section going - and I do get the sense that here, Obi rather enjoys the treatment.

(Speaking of which, I *really* want a foot rub, now. :P)

Once things proceed and Obi and Folte are left alone, I do love how he seems to get some of his control back, even chained to her and playing the role of slave. Loved his use of the Force and the description of how he sort of swept it over her! Very hot! :D

Great "rescue!" I'm looking forward to see how the others play out! :)

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From NakedClones on May 14, 2012
Obi Wan Kenobi as a Zygerrian slave? A shaved buff blonde Zygerrian slave? You are my idol, Jade. Seriously. I could read your writings all day. I think my favorite part were the reactions of all the other characters as they were assessing Obi Wan's new attire. Rex had the most conservative reaction, of all. Of course, I couldn't get my mind thinking past "Rex in slave attire. Mmmmmm..... I'll rescue him. I will..." After that, it was all just a blur, and I'm afraid I got terribly distracted. But anyway, love the concept of this whole story, and it's a delightful twist on everything that happened in Zygerria. Can't go wrong with this one. Somehow when you shave Obi Wan, he loves to be about 15 again. The Queen is going to have some fun, I think, (and so are we.)
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From laloga13 on May 14, 2012
Love this idea! I can't wait to see how it's played out in the various ways...

Fantastic notion to have Ahsoka be the slaver and Obi the "bait," so to speak. I loved how he was determined to do pretty much anything to see a mission be successful, even at the cost of his pride. Ahsoka and Anakin's banter was priceless, and I loved the hint of Rexsoka thrown in for good measure - we'll have to see Rexter in that getup one day. ;)

I'm enjoying this a great deal, and am most *definitely* looking forward to the naughty bits. :)
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From serendip on May 14, 2012
Negotiations that might end up in the bedroom?? Erm, point me in that direction! I just loved this - he never discounts any option that might get him results he needs. Lol, there's something sooo Obi about that, so Jedi and so pragmatic... and yet... lol, so frickin' sexy :D Hey, if his skill with women seals the deal, why the heck not? So hot and I love it. I love that Ahsoka is the slaver here, such a role reversal but it's awesome and Obi stays so cool and confident always on top of everything :D

Perfect set up, I cannot wait for more but no rush! Long is always better :D Mmmm... Obi practically naked in a collar and a chain... How much? I'll pay it. That's an image I could go to bed happy with. I like being teased anyway ;-) Fantastic start! Great job!
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