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Reviews for Ben & Gwen: Pool Smex

By : semetouke
  • From Korin-Dragoon on March 30, 2017

    You should continue this story thread as it could turn into a great multi-chapter story.


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  • From ANON - Chris on November 26, 2012
    Your stories are based on good ideas, but are spoiled for the reader by poor grammar (note spelling) and punctuation. The erratic use of capital letters is disconcerting. Get a good beta who's good at English grammar (probably educated before the 1970s) and they's be readable.
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  • From Bennetnelson on May 10, 2012
    Is it hOt in here or is it just this fic. Wow just wow you blew me away with this fic truly amazing I know it's been a while since you have updated hell you probably don't even write here anymore but I read it I liked it and I reviewed because I wanted too. Don't be afraid to start new sentences and paragraphs if a new person talked separate it as a separate paragraph. But nun the less completely enjoyable really hope you still write here. Chow Bennet out
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  • From Aysha on May 07, 2012
    It was an ok story but your writing needs help you use the word AS way too much. Don't be afraid to end your sentence and start a new one. Also try using (ed) instead of (ing) on some of your words it will help. "moaned Gwen" instead of "moaning Gwen"

    One more thing Gwen and Ben are the same age they were even born on the same day.



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