Click Here!

Reviews for For the Throne

By : LunarEclipse
  • From ANON - Archimedes on September 11, 2011
    This story was decent. Competently writter. You asked for reviews but I really don't know what to tell you. I liked the fact that you had Azula make up a cover story for Zuko personally and it never being addressed again; lesser writers go for the 'no waste' approach where if something is mentioned it WILL get used, but the fact that you just brushed over it without so much as bringing up the fact that they didn't have to use it really gave the story a more dynamic, realistic bent. I realize it's a small thing but it's small things like that, when added up, that make a story noticeably better.

    Meanwhile, I didn't like the casual cursing. Now obviously I'm no prude, I'm on AFF after all, but casual cursing in an Avatar thread by series-named characters always breaks the suspension of disbelief for me. I just don't really buy it, you know? I mean damnit and such is fine if you feel the situation calls for it, but when they start dropping 'fucks' and 'cocks' and, really, even 'bitch' in casual conversation, it just feels weird and takes me out of the story.

    Beyond that, it's pretty good. I would have liked it if Azula had always had a little thing for Zuko, but I guess there's still time for her to discover that secretly all the hostility she's shown him over their lives is because she wants deep down always wanted to rape him so hard he goes blind.
    Report Review

  • From BahamutZero on October 03, 2009
    Great story so far. I am really looking forward to the conversation between Zuko and Azula. I'm sure it will be quite entertaining. I liked how you set up your plot as it is certainly easy to picture Ozai to write off Azula as a failure as well and then for Azula to try to find her own way to achieve her goal of Fire Lord. It was also enjoyable to see you just didn't have them do a complete turn in their feelings like have Azula say she was sorry and Zuko automatically forgive her and that's it. No you are staying true to the core of their characters and only making slight adjustments to fit the characters to your plot. I wasn't quite expecting Azula to give Zuko a concussion (I actually found this a bit amusing even though I like Zuko) but that just added to the entertainment value. I really enjoyed your story and look forward to reading more.
    Report Review

  • From TimeTeller on September 30, 2009
    Very meh. Dialogue is clunky and plenty of spelling mistakes. Also quit writing author notes and explanations to stuff people don't wanna know about.
    Report Review

  • From ANON - dre on September 30, 2009
    Nice to see that you're continuing it. The latest chapter is excellent, like the previous ones.
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Nine on August 04, 2009
    Great so far, are you going to continue it?
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Lawl on July 20, 2009
    great so far keep going
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Clown Shoes on July 12, 2009
    Good story so far, keep it up. Though, you shouldn't care about the reviews, this site isn't as popular as it used to be.
    Report Review

  • From Jayrich on July 04, 2009
    Interesting twist to this story. Things are not going as planned for Azula, especially since she cracked her own brother's head wide open. Something tells me Mai won't be happy with that. It'll be interesting to see how this goes as they search for a healer, and what Zuko's reaction will be once he comes to. As for reviews, don't sweat yourself over them. I think this site has been going through a dry spell. Hell, I haven't gotten as many reviews as I wanted for my Avatar story. Hope this doesn't persuade you to stop your writing, though. You got real potential gold going here and you should continue with it.
    Report Review

  • From ninesenshi on July 04, 2009
    Ok, you want reviews so I will give you one. It is a fact of life that you will get many more hits then reviews. You will have to decide if you want to write badly enough to put up with that. In the same way that most authors never get published, most people who read fanfics don't bother to review them.
    While your writing is decent, I come to ADULT fanfic sites to read stories with sex. If I wanted fanfics without sex, there are alot more places to accomodate me. So when you have no sex in your first two chapters it discourages me. When you state you are a long way from sex it makes me want to quit your story. There is not much incentive for me to continue reading a very stock plot-line with no real action just because you claim to be building up to something. Your story needs to sell itself fast. Especially on an adult site. I want some sex at the latest by chap 2, or else you need to have such a cool story going on that I do not care if I have to wait. Unfrotunately you are not managing either.
    SailorNemesis
    Report Review

  • From ANON - MZo on July 04, 2009

    Good fic

    Although you say to be a novice, in fact you don't seem it, I like how the story is developed.

    It’s a good start, you should not leave it, please continue it.
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Shard on July 04, 2009
    Try not to let the lack of reviews get to you, I think if you got that many hits people like the story idea they just haven't made up an opinion or just lazy. Personally I don't like to review because I never know the what to write, but it's the least fans can do. By the way I like how this is shapping up and thanks for the longer chapter, I'm curious to see how you convince Zuko and how long it will take Iroh to chase him. Oh yeah, is Mai going to blow when she finds out what's going on? I look forward to the next installment.
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Random Bob on July 04, 2009
    Shaping up to be an awesome story, please keep it up.
    Report Review

  • From ANON - redgoblin on July 03, 2009
    hi keep up the good work got a nice feel to it. sorry i didnt review last time
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Some Dude on July 03, 2009
    Great story so far, please keep it going.
    Report Review

  • From Jayrich on June 30, 2009
    Interesting, but short. Hope you post a few more chapters.

    BTW, you misspelled Throne in your title.
    Report Review

T.O.S. | Content Guidelines | DMCA Info | F.A.Q. | Facebook | Tumblr | Abuse | Support | Contact | Donate

Click Here!