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Reviews for If You Bend It, They Will Cum

By : Datalaughing
  • From ANON - Douglas on February 24, 2016
    Well, I've just spent the last couple days reading your little gem here, and yes, I rubbed more than a couple out over like Chp 3, 5- well, you can guess it was a few. So, in truth, 14 chps, and 15 being an epilogue. I can follow the whole concept, but it could have been fleshed out more in many places, no pun intended.
    Even presenting Suki as you did throughout 6 and 7, I knew she'd kill somebody down the road, just thought it would be Aang or Sokka, or maybe Zuko, and heres why; Because they're males?! Suki's pleasures had always BEEN sapphic (Females only)... til Azula got a hold of her and used a big stone dick in her pussy! And with realizing just what kind of weapon she could be molded into, I'd figure the Fire bitch would ready her new toy to attack on command.
    Killing Katara just seemed like such a waste. Toph was dialed in and ready to kill a lover she just fucked that morning???, Shes just waiting for Suki to do something?, of which seemed wrong in its characterization.
    I thought sure, squish her, burn her, freeze her... then shatter into a million pieces, all of these instead coming from the AVATAR.
    Katara kills Zuko, fine, but his last word was for the one `humanizing` love he finally had. He Fights For the Fire Nation, but is unwilling to accept his nation is in the wrong?
    Again characterizations are very 'off' in spots.
    Other than Sokka/Ty Lee in 7, Ty Lee is mentioned, but doesn't even show up for anything story-wise. I could see a couple remarks about her showing up in 15; that didn't happen. It just occurred to me; have it found in 15 that Mai was pregnant, so she (and us, the readers) could give back to the world a life to balance out all those horribly taken. Didn't happen. So, make it Ty Lee???
    The Epilogue. Fire Lord Iroh... fits. He names a successor, and we have Fire Lord Mai... and it fits, dear writer. So, so Very Sad, was her existence.
    Really, nothing of note from either the Earth Kingdom or the Water Tribes?
    And finally, Sokka and Toph. Glad you let them be together, but just 2 kids??? And no mention of sex??!!?? Having That talk with Kataang and Poppy could have been Very funny. They're 10 or 11, having taken out a skiff to check some nearby shrimp traps (because DAD said `I'm tired, you kids get some extra chores to help me out today`), and with Po being a Waterbender, yeah, you all see how the job gets done a Whole lot faster. Didn't help that a little wind blew up, too. So they hit the shore, tie up the boat, and race for the house... all under the patter of heavy raindrops. But they hear something? screaming?!?!? Into the house they go, dripping wet, to find Mom on her hands and knees howling in front of the fireplace, and Dad right behind her barking orders as he squeezes her hips.
    Both quite naked. Oppps.
    It could have used a decent beta-ing, too, what with Alot of gaffes overall, but it does read good. No, Well. You had a vision, it just hurt when I got to the end. Thank you for this.
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  • From Randomkai on August 06, 2008
    Wow...dark ending man...still i enjoyed the ride.
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  • From Genereaver on August 03, 2008
    Well, congratulations. You've written the first fapfic to ever make me cry.
    Aside from the ending, EPIC and AMAZING are the only words I can put for this.

    ...That said, do you think we could get an "I Am Legend"-style alternate, happier ending? Because, well... FUCK.
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  • From Jc211213 on August 01, 2008
    this was a great story i cant wait to read your next story
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  • From SunTsuToriden on July 28, 2008
    This new chapter was something of a novel experience.

    I'm quite intrigued at the new direction this may take. Count it as one person willing to support you and wanting to read more!
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  • From on July 27, 2008
    A good story, but the ending, in all honesty, stunk. I've NEVER been a fan of the 'bad ending' to a story, and I was liking the story up until that point.
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  • From JohnMadden on July 27, 2008
    An interesting ending to one the best stories ever.
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  • From SunTsuToriden on June 23, 2008
    Wow... that was really unexpected... And really quite sad...

    I hope you write an epliogue, I'd like to read it. This whole story was fantastic from beginning to end, even if the end was a little sadder than hoped...

    You are one great writer, and I look forward to more of your stuff in the future.

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  • From TheeDragon on June 21, 2008
    I've been following your story since chapter eight or so and all I can say is bravo. It is the only story on AFF that actually made me come back to check on it (once I forgot what it was called and spent a solid hour searching for it). The story is well formatted, easy to read, and good with spelling and grammar. Your over arching story was also compelling, and I found your portrayal of Azula particularly fascinating (so much so that I'm attempting to write some fan fiction of my own). Furthermore, your descriptive style of writing lends itself particularly well to both the smut and battle scenes, and the former were always wonderfully executed and creative. If I could pick a favourite author on the site it would be a good tossup between you and Dovienya with no one else even coming close.

    That being said, I wasn't particularly fond of the ending. Given how well the story was paced this could really have been done in three chapters instead of one. There were a few plot threads that were severed entirely, and I was kind of sad not to see them resolve themselves. Given the amount of time you've spent on the story it's understandable that you probably want to get it over with. And the one sour spot (for me) does nothing to diminish the greatness of your story. I can only hope that one day I have the discipline to work on a story long enough to create something as well crafted as your piece here. A marvellous story and I hope you do indeed keep writing because the site itself will probably be diminished due to your absence

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  • From Gunwild on June 21, 2008
    Shit, I didn't see that ending coming.

    Good finale, would kind of have liked it to be more sex-filled.
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  • From JohnMadden on June 21, 2008
    I'd be interested in seeing that.
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  • From InkHeart17 on June 18, 2008
    I really love how you take advantage of bending talents and theorized natural occurrences for benders' bodies. Zuko's sizzling seed, and the waterbenders icing Azula were genius!
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  • From fuuyou on June 18, 2008
    yo, how about sokka and katura get it on
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  • From SunTsuToriden on June 17, 2008
    Sacred Carp! This was a great chapter!

    I swear, I'm going to read and reread this story to death...
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  • From SunTsuToriden on June 04, 2008
    I have always thought it, and this chapter just confirmed it.

    Azula is one nasty teenager. I mean, the things she is able, and very willing, to do are just insane...

    That said, Kudos to Zuko for finally pulling his head out of his ass and realising his feelings for Mai are more powerful than Azula's lust for him.
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