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By : whirleeq
  • From ANON - Inumiko on December 26, 2006
    Beautiful work. Ignore the flamers, you write the way you want to write. More Zutara! :)
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  • From ANON - WS on December 26, 2006
    Okay, this'll be a bit toasty for you whirleeQ but please read on cause it'll get better. It's a pretty good plot so far, though throwing the firelord in there like an over glorified soldier = a really bad idea, you should never throw a ruler into that role- that's just simple chess, the king is undoubtedly the most valuable piece so you don't send him out while he has pawns to do the dirty work (in other words he should just be a figure-head for now- and yes I know I'm ragging on you right now but you'll have to admit I bring up a valid point sooner or later). So don't throw the Firelord in there like that- send in your Colonel Shinu to occupy Ba Sing Se, but leave Ozai back in the Fire Nation because right now he would whip all their asses without any trouble unless you've decided to make him a pansy which would take all the fun out of the story for your readers (it's important for you to think about your work through the eyes of your target audiance- and I'm well aware that I'm a horrid speller). Alright that's enough flaming, but that was just author to author to help improve the story a bit- cause I do like it. Yeah, the flame just covered the only issue that was bugging me seriously, not counting the part with Ozai coming in WAY too soon, I give you a seven out of ten. congrats! ;p
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  • From ANON - Emily (SxK_YGOfan) on December 24, 2006
    Zuko is my hero! = 3 I love it! = D I'm a Zutara fan myself. Great job! = )
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  • From ANON - J on December 24, 2006
    I liked this chapter, has a good build up!
    Happy Holidays!
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  • From ANON - red on December 23, 2006
    WOW! this story is really good! The plot development is nice - all that it needs is just a tiny bit more smut. But, the story is good, the characters are developed - there is detail, which really helps. I am eagerly awaiting the next chapter.
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  • From ANON - Anime Destiny on December 23, 2006
    Chapter Four was certainly a good chapter and I clearly didn't expect Mai to be so upset of Zuko being with Katara. I actually still believe that Mai cares for Zuko deeply since her child years, even though her feelings for Zuko didn't surface much in the second season. Interesting and unexpected plot twist you came up with.

    Sokka and Toph's scene was also good and interesting when stopping the Fire Lord's message being deliver to Azula.

    I'm also really curious what will happen in your story now that Azula doesn't know that her father is coming nor does he tell her in his words that the Avatar will be executed.

    It is also nice for Zuko to trust Iroh again and would also be interesting to find out what his plan is.

    Finally, I appreciate your response and opinion on the Water Oasis situation and your thought's on Azula's character. I wasn't really flaming you at all on the situation but just giving you a fair criticism. Despite that I'm still enjoying this story and will continue reading this. With this review finish, enjoy the holidays and I look forward towards the next chapter.










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  • From ANON - Panther Eyes on December 22, 2006
    zuko is gonna get killed or something by his father antway... not surprised. i hope aang gets better soon the world needs him a great deal now. is mai gonna try 2 kill katara since azula wont remove her from zuko? how r sokka n toph gonna save aang n katara? so many questions.

    By the way... Happy Holidays
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  • From ANON - Chris on December 22, 2006
    Very well written. I didn't think the water thing was over the top. You obviously are very thoughtful and insightful in your characterizations and psych. Very nice. So much detail. And you gave a lot of insight into Azula in this chap. I can totally see expressions and nuance of feeling of the characters.

    I am loving it...

    Happy... everthing!

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  • From ANON - k15 on December 22, 2006
    This is so not fair! It's getting better and better and better. I love the cliffy! I wanna know what happens next. ANyway, keep up the great work. Have a great New Year and Happy Holidays. Later. K15

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  • From ANON - Anon on December 20, 2006
    this is very well written, please, continue writing.
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  • From Spleef on December 17, 2006
    This intrigues me. I am very eager to see more.
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  • From ANON - poornmiserable on December 16, 2006
    good job with this i love to see where you will go from here keep up the good work and update soon
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  • From ANON - deathsprincess05 on December 14, 2006
    Really good story so far. :3 Can't wait for your next chapters. :3
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  • From ANON - Blackash Fox on December 09, 2006
    Good so far. Update soon.
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  • From ANON - Anime Destiny on December 08, 2006
    I wonder what Zuko's got up his sleeve. Hmm, interesting.

    There was one part that you seem to had push a little too far in the story. I thought the part where Azula tossed the water oasis bottle forcing Katara to catch it may have been pushing it. However, Azula's character usually is known to be bossy, a teaser, and usually being manipulative.

    If you haven't work on your next chapter yet, you should probably work a little on Sokka and Toph or you could just go back to Azula and Aang again. I can say it many times, but this story is getting good.
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