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Reviews for Slow Heat

By : Spleef

From ANON - Jack on April 19, 2008
I love your stories i told you this, please please rite more everyone is an asshole if they don't give you good reviews, i really want to know waat happens next
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From ANON - Twilight Sovereign on April 14, 2008
Well, first I would like to say that I have read every single chapter of this story in a single sitting. And it was quite good --good enough infact to convince me to forego any sleep I could have gotten instead, before work demanded my attention.

Now with that said, I found your take on the Avatar storyline very creative, while still managing to capture that essence that makes the original story one that is so well loved. Your characterizations are very convincing; I do love you've kept more of the formal diologue of the show, as one of my biggest pet peeves when reading any fanfiction set in a world like Avatar The Last Air Bender, is when the authors modernize the speach with slang that you would never hear used in the show. I have on occation stumbled across a few errors which seem to me more accidental typos, or perhaps a flaw caused by the site uploading the story, than anything else. As they are minor they didn't confuse me too greatly, and are about the only thing I could point out in terms of a constructive critique as far as your story goes.

However this is one important thing I do feel the need to bring up; as a writer of many years now, and someone who has had her stories disected, analyzed, and generally picked apart. I wouldn't be able to leave what I feel is a good review without pointing out I dislike the way you go about asking for reviews in your notes. When a person writes a story to be published, they do so under the knowledge that they'll never truly be able to receive the opinions of those that purchase their stories. Yes they do recieve pay, but often the pay for published work isn't always that great unless the book itself catches on: Harry Potter, Lord of The Rings, etc.

One should never write under the expectation of anything other than the satisfaction of doing so; authors are a very special lot in life. There were times long ago when people who were gifted with the ability to tell a tale were thought very highly of, and still today their love of doing so is the reason so many new aspiring authors have sprung up through the world of fanfiction. Fanfiction authors are of course taking a story already well loved, and embellishing on them; exploring possibilities not explored by their creators. To do this for credit, or to use the threat of not going any further for a lack of it, is not something I am very fond of seeing. And I admit that, not the content of your story which I highly enjoyed, was perhaps the greatest dissapointment I recieved upon reading it.

My advice from one author to another, is not to get swept away in the number of reviews you receive. Instead cherish the knowledge that your story is being read and favored, if you receive reviews then it's only further evidence to what you as it's writer should already know. If you can't believe in your story without a lot of compliments, then you can't ever take it to it's full potential. It makes writing very hard, when you do it for those reasons. I can tell you enjoy writing by the effort and thought you've put into each chapter, never allow the number of reviewers to take that enjoyment from you. Write for love, but please dear, do not write for aknowledgement.

I'm sure if Iroh had actually existed, he would say something along the lines of, "Great people do not become great because they ask to be. They become great by doing what feels right to them, and only later find out it was right to other people as well."

I hope my review will be taken as I intend it to be, and no offence is ment by any of it. However if that is how it's taken, then I do apologize for that --just not for the review itself, as honesty is never something I think she come with regret. I do love your story, just not your approtch for receiving love for it. I hope to read more in the future, and wish you and your muse the best of luck in all of your writing challenges --future and present.

Sincerly,
Twilight Sovereign
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From ANON - Kitten on April 10, 2008
I like it so far. I don't find many story's that I actually get interested in. Well story's that aren't one shots. I'd like to read more if you write more.
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From ANON - Lady on April 03, 2008
C'mon Spleef, in the name of the dune-cat, write some more!!

Lady
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From ANON - ZarakiKenRoby on April 01, 2008
I must say I am really digging the trubulent interaction and relation of Zuko & Katara. It will be interesting to see how you bring them together, and not just intimately.

But seriously bey get off your ego's dick. I don't mean any disrespect when I say this but come on, you'll stop writing if you don't any more reviews. Come on dude, either you write for the passion of it and be thankfully that there is a place for you to share these stories, and also be thankfull that there are a handfull of individuals who like reading these stoies, passionately! Either that or hang it up and call it quites.

As much as we like your stories and what not, this is not an obligation that you are required to for our salvation na, don't get it twisted na, the fans of Avatar and this site as well as others are grateful towards you for taking time out of your busy schedule to write these fics, BUT YOU AIN'T DOIN' US ANY FAVORS.

As I said before I DO NOT write this commentin a tone that is filled with spite, mallice, or any ill feelings toward you. I mean no disrespect at all man, but seriously you need a reality check.

You can't judge the amount of success your getting with your fics by how many comments & reviews your getting, but rather the quality and content of the review and comment.

As I said before LOVE the new chapter can't wait to see what happens next.

GOD BLESS!

P.S

For the love GOD PLEASE DON't speed up or make any alterations to YOUR storyloine and/or plot just because of what I and other people say. When I say this PLEASE DO NOT write in the next chapter that Katara and Zuko finally set aside their differences towards one antoher and fall in love with each other, you UNLESS THAT IS WHAT YOU ACTUALLY INTEND to write about next.

In short I'm saying do things your way. Do them as you see fit, but more importantly do them because you are passionate about it!

Take it easy and be safe man, come back sweeter and lot less bitter when you post your net chapter.

GOD BLESS!
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From ANON - Kirsten on March 30, 2008
I just finished reading chapter 13..
and i wainting anxiety to the next one!! I hope to see it soon ^^
thank you very much for the story ;)

(sorry about my writting, my english is not really good..)
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From ANON - Kirsten on March 30, 2008
I really like this chapter, the story is getting greater every step!
thak you for writting ^^
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From ANON - Kirsten on March 30, 2008
im enjoying this story very much...
thank you for writting ^^
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From ANON - Besaid on March 25, 2008
it really sucks that people arent reveiwing your wonderfull stories. I love them! I dont have an account on AFF and for a while people withought accounts couldnt review. I didnt know how long it was like that.

Anyways, your story is really good and I sinserly hope that you update, just for the people that really like your stories. Have a good dya!
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From ANON - kalka on March 25, 2008
I just started to read your stories and I really like how the characters interact with each other. Its not mary-sue ish. I really like your story and i hope that you continue them!
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From Darkwolf01 on March 17, 2008
You know what? I actually like this story. It has promise, and i love the pairing of Zuko and Katara. I do hope you continue to write more, but get the stick out of your ass and stop being so selfish with this, "If you don't review, i won't continue the story". Its bullshit.

Now i don't mean any offence personally, and i apologise porfusly for how i am actually writing this, as i really do like your story, but come on! I've seen worse writers than you, and they don't go and do what your doing, they are simply happy that people are actually reading their story at all. You should write the story for the story, i love writing and would hate myself if i stopped writing simply because i didnt get enough reviews.

I admit, yes i like reviews a lot, they are encouraging and make you feel elated that people are reading your story and bothering to leave reviews when they simply don't have to. Face it, people are extremly lazy, or else have this thing about waiting until the story is finished, (as i have so far, as i have never read it before and have waited until i could not go any further) before leaving a review.

I hope you do continue, and do it, not only for the readers, but for yourself as well. And i apologise once again, as i had no intention of writing this as i am now, but i am sick and tired of reading something thats worth reading, and then at the latest chapter find out it's going to be discontinued simply because they're not getting enough praise for their work. Well, here's your praise from me. It's good, it's promising and can get better, but only if you actually get rid of this silly attitude towards reviews.

Wolfsoul
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From waterrockz on March 17, 2008
great chapter!
you are doing an amazing job with this story!
keep up the great work, time, and effort that you are putting into this sweet story
hope u post more soon
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From AdamIam on March 17, 2008
Love the chapter so keep them coming. I ALWAYS read you stories and I will keep doing so for as long as you write them. Walkingpapers
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From ANON - Bianca on March 17, 2008
i just started reading this story yesterday and i like it. I'm not even registered on this site but i wanted to drop a comment after reading ur note and the end of the last chapter. I hope u continue posting new chapters ;)
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From ANON - Brittany on March 05, 2008
this is an awesome story. I like the way you go along with the story line just like the cartoon. I can't wait til you post another chapter.
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