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Reviews for In Bai Shan

By : Gunwild
  • From Alcaloid on April 20, 2007
    Just had to review again after reading chapter 3. “Okay, thank you, bye now.” that is so Toph! And it's so cute that she's so eager to be alone with her beloved. What I love about this fic (love not merely like) is that there is love between them, and that is what makes the loli irrelevant. You make Toph mature enough to engage in the relationship, but you also retained her spontaneity which makes her so endearing. It's great to finally find a writer who is both talented and cares about the characters. Someone less skilled than you would have written something along the lines of: "Hey Toph, you have a cute butt, wanna shag? - Sure, I have nothing better to do before dinner." - laugh if you want, but I've read fics that looked exactly like that - Gah, the horror - Sorry for the overly long review, I tend to talk too much when I really like something.
    Diego
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  • From Alcaloid on April 20, 2007
    I was really unsure about what to expect when I first read 'Feel It', but the first 3 paragraphs convinced me to continue reading. I am also always unsure about sequels, but here again you're writing a solid story where the characters' action are believable. What I like most so far is that you take the time to tell a good tale, and not just throw sex scenes at my face like I've seen so many other hentai-writers-wannabes do.
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  • From Spleef on February 21, 2007
    Good stuff as always. It's always such a pleasure to see when you have updated. This chapter was a bit long, but hey, the more the merrier :)
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  • From JLucPitard on February 12, 2007
    Good fun! I love the mystery of the weird hosts. Each of the 'love' scenes have had that hesitant and awkward teen behavior that I can still vividly recall. And yes, it's been a few years since!
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  • From ANON - Anon on February 08, 2007
    This story is excellent, plenty of hot action, but with an interesting plot as well. This has to be the best Tokka story I've ever read, you really make the characters feel real, I especially like your portrayal of Toph.
    Kae and Won definitely seem creepy. I look forward to seeing what happens next.
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  • From ANON - Anon on February 02, 2007
    I love this story... Please! Please! make more
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  • From ryuukoenko on February 01, 2007
    I love the plot. The You really seem to know what the characters 'would' do, if this situation presented itself. I just wish that you would write a third chapter, or a sequel. I usually like to read PWP's but this story was so intriguing that I just couldn't put it down, so to speek. You've got real talent.
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  • From kllrjess on February 01, 2007
    Oh, this is just as amazing as Feel it! You have such a wonderful knack for bringing out the hidden qualities of the Avatar gang, and using them to craft an incredible story with characterizations that are so dead on, you would think this was written by the series creators! Amazing job, perfect in fact!
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  • From ANON - The one and only on January 07, 2007
    Wow. This is the best avatar based fiction story that i have read. You did a great job portraying the characters and creating a great plot while at the same time making great love scenes. I hope you get the next chapter soon... I'm dying to learn what's next.
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 21, 2006
    When r u gonna write more?
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  • From Spleef on December 17, 2006
    As good as ever!
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  • From ANON - NafeinPraetor on December 14, 2006
    Your stories are truly amazing. I'm very happy to see you're still around and providing your high quality writing. I think Tokka is just plain cool, and you do a great job of making them seem believable and in character. Really looking forward to future chapters.
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  • From ANON - midori on December 10, 2006
    This was, to put it simply, amazing. Please continue this story, it is the perfect ancedote for an avatar deprived person.
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  • From ANON - TheDarkOne on December 05, 2006
    Another excellent chapter. Ooooo I hope more comes soon!
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  • From ANON - Brightblinder on December 05, 2006
    I really like this story it has a very good plot. I think your doing a wonderful job. Keep up the good work.
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