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Reviews for The KP Chapters

By : Jayrich
  • From darkecofreak23 on July 13, 2007
    Ok, first off. Good premise for this story. Reminds me of Spectre666's Addictive series. Secondly, you've got to pick a timeframe for this story, past or present tense; you can't have both. Thirdly, what is with the odd capitalization? You don't need to capitalize every couple of words. Lastly, you do realize you're supposed to start a new line when a new character speaks, right? When one gets done or is interrupted, start a new line for the new character speaking.
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  • From lothous on July 09, 2007
    great story i love u explaning how ron is a clutz
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  • From Clue21 on July 02, 2007
    good stuff
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  • From GhostwriterMO on June 10, 2007
    Dude that was a great story. I was really hoping for a Ron,Kim and Yori threesome (about time Kim found out how great Yori is) I really loved how the story (even Motor Ed and Adrynal Lynn's sex scene)worked. YEAH SERIOUSLY BRO! A quick roundhouse kick knocks out Motor Ed once again. How does he keep getting in here? Dude I also got an idea, Camille Leon you know the shape shifter trades places with Kim but is "busted" when Ron and Bonnie get "involved". Sorry if its a bad idea but I thought you might like it.

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  • From RAW19 on June 06, 2007
    Another most excellent chapter. 10/10
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  • From Kothoga on June 05, 2007
    Awesome work on the chapter Jayrich :D

    I hope that Yori will be following with Ron and Kim back to the states to get better knowing themself :D

    Can't wait for the next one
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  • From MDR on June 04, 2007
    I've enjoyed this story for quite a while, but these last couple of chapters have me scratching my head.

    First, in the last chapter, Ron is accusing Kim of not being spontanious. Excuse me? Did they just forget the last 30+ chapters? Heck, just go back one chapter, and Kim spontaniously starts a make-out session with her mom! This arguement has absolutely no basis in reality, and kinda makes the whole chapter sound very forced.

    And in this chapter, after everything, and everyone, Kim and Ron have done, she is still upset when a girl eyes Ron? This too makes no sense. She would be more on the side of wondering if Yori wouldn't mind a threesome.
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  • From bigherb81 on June 03, 2007
    Awsome so far always looking forward to your future chapters man you never fail to amaze. Can't wait to see how the race turns out and how much luckier the Ronman can get.
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  • From Kothoga on June 02, 2007
    Hehe...It seems that Kim,Ron, Monique and Bonnie forgot the rule they made.....that Ron only will be banging Kim,Monique and Bonnie :D

    I hope the next chapter will have some sweet lesbian strapon sex and some anal sex for the Chosen one :D (He deserve some Kim and Yori backdoor action about now :D)

    And I hope you will make a chapter with Dr. Director and Ron again :D
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  • From RAW19 on June 01, 2007
    wow. that chapter was wow worthy!
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  • From RAW19 on May 30, 2007
    another excellent chapter.
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  • From RAW19 on May 30, 2007
    another excellent chapter.
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  • From bloodrain01 on May 29, 2007
    why the cliff i hate them hope to read more
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  • From rcwilliams on May 29, 2007
    Hot chapter. I smell a three way coming. But anyway.. can't wait to see what happens next. When will Bonnie and Tara make another appearance and can Tara just have Ron to herself for at least one chapter?
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  • From Kothoga on May 29, 2007
    Ok Jayrich....You know what you have to do now....Make a threesome with Kim/Yori/Ron in the next chapter
    and make Kim purchase a strap-on (for those lonely Ronless nights and she needs to screw Bonnie or perhaps Monique)and make her break it in by screwing Yori (Pussy, Ass and Orally is what I demand ) and give Ron some Asian butt loving too when you are at it two...he deserves some ass to put his cock inside (Long time when I read sex involving anal sex)...now get cracking
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