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Reviews for Bitter Alliance

By : Looneyluna
  • From ANON - Anon on August 17, 2006
    I wanna kick Ozai´s ass...
    please let me kick his ass
    please let him suffer...
    .....Baaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaad Ozai!!!!
    DAMN YOU YOU LITTLE BASTARD!!!
    .....
    I hope Zuko and Katara will be safe ;____;

    please more!!!
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  • From ANON - suki on August 17, 2006
    love it, please keep it up!
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  • From ANON - Anna on August 14, 2006
    Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
    ^^ *clapping* nice new plan!!!!
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  • From ANON - Scorpinac on August 14, 2006
    That said, I look forward to the next chapter. Well done. More, please!
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  • From ANON - Scorpinac on August 14, 2006
    You know, you could have phrased it "I want him laid to rest immediately." rather than the whole trapping the soul thing. Just saying.
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  • From Spleef on August 08, 2006
    I just wanna hug Zuko and Katara...
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  • From Spleef on August 05, 2006
    I was so turned on by the smut... it is elegantly written.
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  • From ANON - Anna on August 05, 2006
    HI ^^
    as always nice chapter
    i wanna read more ^^
    i´m really ecxited...
    how will Zuko safe Katara and Sokka???
    Is Katara now pregnant???
    gNNNNN I can´t stand this!!!
    it´s sooooo gnnnnn.......
    More more more more more!!!!^^
    ... eh yeah......please....
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  • From ANON - Acastus on August 04, 2006
    L,

    The quality of writing is again quite good. The hardest part of this story for me to accept is not the sex, however, it is the basic premise that it starts with Aang and Iroh dead. I love those guys! This strategic choice may turn some readers off, but you aren't writing for them by definition. I still enjoy the story, however, and will continue reading.

    A few other notes. Katara's reaction seems on target for the situation. Zuko's seems a bit over the top. You make a convincing case that he needs to put on a show for the spies, but I don't really see why he needs to go into the lurid verbal description of what he is doing to her. Isn't just doing it enough? This maybe my own predilection for understatement surfacing here though. Lastly, it occasionally feels that the characters' diction is too polished. For example, at one point in Chapter 1 Katara remarks "Why don’t you use one of your concubines for that purpose?" I'd consider just leaving it at "Why don’t you use one of your concubines?"

    On balance, it's another winner. The core plot is again quite tight. This is always an advantage.

    As for posting on ASN, we don't really have any rules against adult content. I'd say it's okay to post with an "R" rating. It'd probably be the most reviewed story in the forum.
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  • From ANON - Anna on August 02, 2006
    oh god what a live ;___;
    poor little Zuko trying to survive with Katara by his side...
    yeaah this is a good story ^^

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  • From Silverwolf1633 on July 31, 2006
    Simply excellent and well written! Awaiting the next installment...
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  • From ANON - Spleefmistress on July 31, 2006
    I do not know which one of your Zutara stories I like best-they both rock. You are so awesome!!!
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  • From ANON - Anna on July 31, 2006
    You rock!!!!
    Zuko should really sire an heir...with Katara
    oH a cute little baby ^.^

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  • From ANON - Rinali on July 30, 2006
    This story ROX!
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  • From ANON - Curves_of_steel on July 30, 2006
    You should write a butt load of these stories (I mean the butt load part with sincere affection)I would read and review every single one I love your stories.!
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