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Reviews for Happy Birthday Ron Stoppable

By : Doug4422
  • From NarutosBrat on December 27, 2012
    Hmph, if I were Ron, I'd have used my hands and mouth to bring Kim off at least once for every girl that preceded her, especially considering how he'd said Kim was going to 'get it'.

    And really, that's the only gripe I have about this, aside from each session going so quickly. A good oral work up is always good.
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  • From darkecofreak23 on July 14, 2007
    A great story with only one major hiccup: You have GOT to use something besides commas; seriously, comma splices run rampant here. Use a period, for Kim's sake. It's that little dot next to the comma. That's what it's there for, to end sentences.
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  • From ANON - Joey on December 19, 2006
    DUDE YOU ROCK!!! This is defineitly 'book' style porno mat. Have a good day dude!! :o)
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  • From ANON - robert on January 21, 2006
    ggggooooooooooooooooooooooodddddddd ddddddddddddddddddaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaammmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - Kristen on January 17, 2006
    Wowza...

    That was awesome.

    keep writing! I love the descriptions, although next time maybe there could be less girls or more detail for each one. I would be opposed to seeing some different positions used, either. Just a suggestion, though. Keep up the excellent work!!! :)
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  • From ANON - romantic_cancer on January 14, 2006
    Great story... keep it up!!!! Best story I've read so far on this site.
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  • From ANON - Fleur on October 15, 2005
    WOW!!! THAT WAS AWSOME!!! WRITE MORE!!!

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  • From ANON - lets go on September 24, 2005
    WOW THAT WAS THE BEST LEMON I HAVE EVER READ MY EYES ARE WELDING UP TEARS BECAUSE OF THAT STORY I MEAN WOW DAMN IF YOU HAVE ANYMORE THEN DAMN DAMN IM READING THEM
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  • From ANON - Damion Kitsune on September 10, 2005
    What the hell?! Since when is Ron popular with the ladies?! (At *all*, let alone so much that they'd all want to sleep with him?...!)

    Oh, and incidentally, you're supposed to end sentences that are in quotations with commas, and sentences that are on their own with periods - not the other way around.
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  • From ANON - Jeff on September 03, 2005
    Who knew you were into writing lemons.

    Still got a problem with Mankey?

    The Halfa Wannabe
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  • From ANON - Anon on July 07, 2005
    fucking brilliant. dam that was good. because of you i live up to my name.

    as a joke in your next one mention a female naked mole rat
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  • From ANON - Lemon Fresh on July 06, 2005
    Good lord, ths was possibly the best thing I've ever read. Truly you have a god given gift at this, I hope to see ore of your work in the future.
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  • From ANON - chris on July 03, 2005
    great story really loved reading it. i do have one suggestion, you might want to consider goiing into more details about your characters. I know that anyone who has watched the show would know what they look like. but its still a good idea to try to elaborate on it especcially since we are seeing them in a way we have never seen them before.
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  • From ANON - Horatius on June 26, 2005
    An excellent story. I'm waiting patiently for the next chapter, should you decide to do it. Ron and Shego could be fun, but having Kim 'close at hand' might be interesting. The only review bits of advice I can offer are these: Slow down. YOu've got all the bandwidth you need to tell a story. Take the time to describe the differences in the girls. No two women are alike, ever. You have them all as pretty much carbon copies, just wearing different clothes. They shouldn't look, smell, sound or even feel the same. Not all women make noise at the moment of orgasm; some of them are very quiet until you feel their muscles go rigid. Describe that. In my opinion, that would REALLY add to the story. Secondly, variety.Different people like different things. Not all women enjoy sex in the same way. Add some variety to the mix. Personally, I could see Bonnie perferring things from behind, either on all fours or grabbing a suitable piece of furniture. At a future date, some of the ladies might enjoy being part of a 'Ron Sandwich'. Variety, thats the key.
    Besides those two suggestions, you have a whole lot of potential. Keep it up! And hurry up with that next chapter.
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  • From ANON - charizardag on June 26, 2005
    Are you gonna make a sequel? that would be cool if you did. make a sequel
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