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By : Spleef
  • From whirleeq on October 13, 2005
    very beautiful chappie, girlfriend... awwww... :) It's just... wow. I can't even pick highlights, I enjoyed it so much! Your handling of Iroh was spot on -- good job there. Zuko's reactions to his father's death, to the avatar's escape, and to Iroh were just... perfect. Fantastic imagery, all the way around. I can imagine that some of Ozai's old advisers are none to happy right now... and I would think that Zuko would have to prove his authority to them before he's fully accepted as the new fire lord, since they already think that his is 'weak'... and probably will think so even more, now that Katara is back by his side. You handled Katara well too -- I love that she's confused... I also love that she is not in the same emotional place as Zuko. Let's face it, he's done some pretty awful things to her and her friends... I cannot see her falling 'in love' with him just yet; at least, not while she still is afraid of him. Her non-response to his admission is very realistic, and I applaud you for that... it is so much more beleivable than her suddenly returning the sentiment... anyway, great job as always... u rock socks.

    :)
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  • From ANON - Kai on October 13, 2005
    YAY! I'm so glad that you had written these two chapters. I've been anticipating what you would write next and with success, you were able to pull it off. I'm sooo glad that he finally told her that he loves her. I wish she could've responded, but eh. She's physically weak and tired. Wouldn't blame her. Can't wait for your next chapter(s)!!
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  • From ANON - the_one_who_says_moo on October 13, 2005
    Yay!! Another good chapter, what else can we expect from you?
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  • From ANON - Anon on October 13, 2005
    How sweet. Now, we just need to see how Sokka's been holding up since we last saw him, and maybe have a brief segue to what Aang's up to. Perform at yur leisure! Laters.
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  • From ANON - Chad on October 13, 2005
    Very nice chapter ^^ Lots of details and stuff hehe

    I can't wait to see what happens next Spleef :)
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  • From ANON - Scarylady on October 12, 2005
    Curse it! I forgot to tell you that I like your artwork! It's really lovely! (Zuko without a shirt is always nice...) I won't bug you for updates 'cuz people tend to get sick o' that (though I eagerly look forward to them...) but keep writing! Really...keep writing or evil purple squirls will put a curse on your pudding.
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  • From ANON - Scarylady on October 12, 2005
    I usually don't review (okay this is the first review I've ever written) but a thought occured to me as I was reading this. Ya' know how (at least in the beginning) Zuko kept telling Katara "mine" (often accompanied by a kiss or the grabbing of something). Well I just found it kinda funny that after a while she didn't do the same thing to him...'cause he is as much hers as she's his.
    By the way, like the fic. It's definitly more complex than the average Avatar fic, which is kinda refreshing...^-^
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  • From ANON - Anonymous on October 12, 2005
    Hi there, this chapter is pretty cool. I'm glad that Ozai was defeated and that Zuko kicked his butt. Sorry I didn't reply sooner, I was on fall break from school. I do hope we see chapter 20 real soon. Good luck with the rest of the story and see you later!!!!
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  • From ANON - Laura on October 12, 2005
    Wow...that was, wow. You are a very talented writter! I love your ATLA fics! They are so well written and flow nicely, with just the right mixture of plot, romance, and smut (gotta love the smut! *wink*)! I was so excited when I read the line from Dune, "Fear is the mind killer..." I jumped up and shouted "Dune!" (I love sci-fi...I'm just glad I was home alone when I did that...) Lol! I hope you write more soon. I love reading! XD
    ~fallenflames
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  • From ANON - kitsune-mika-chan on October 12, 2005
    HEY LOVE YOUR FIC IT'S AWSOME UPDATE SOON!! ^_^
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  • From ANON - Chad on October 09, 2005
    Awesome chapter Spleef! It was very thrilling and had a well written plot to it :)
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  • From ANON - Joey on October 09, 2005
    Good story overall. It's got a pretty cool plot and most of the characters are true to their canon. Zuko/Kat is my favorite paring. However, there have been a few mistakes I've picked up on that I wanted to point out.

    The "..." is used too much and in awkward places that disrupts the flow of words. Some of the times it is okay to use, but most often you're making the story difficult to read. Try using a coma, semicolon, or start a new sentence instead.

    Another big thing you do is not use the word "an," as in "an old man's kindness" (title of chapter three). It's not a HUGE thing, but again, it's incorrect and causes grammar freaks such as myself to gnash their teeth in annoyance. xD

    As far as being true to canon goes...Iroh is awesome. He's hilarious, really. I think Zuko could use some work. In the first chapter, I doubt that he'd have left Appa and Momo alone. He knows that they are loyal to Aang and always help to get him out of trouble, and probably would have disposed of them right then and there. He's also rather, uh, soft when dealing with Katara. I always figured he'd be more of a tyrant, but I figure there's a reason for him not being so. You've already hinted at his father - I'm sure that will clear up some things.

    Speaking of Appa and Momo...where are they now? Wouldn't they have at least tried to get back with Aang and the others? They seem like intelligent creatures, it wouldn't be a huge shock to find out that they'd been following the boat the whole time in order to get Aang back when Zuko least expects it.

    Your vocabulary is awesome. Irate, volatile, etc. Most people don't even know what those words mean. (Yeah, I'm serious about that. e.e; ) However, "whimper" is WAY overused. I know the fun of that word 'cause I've noticed I use it a lot as well, but try toning it down a little or using a different word all together. Look up some synonyms for it, even.

    Ah...Another big thing you do is run-on sentences. Instead of using "and" so many times, put in a period and throw in some capitalization. It goes a long way. You also need to remember to put the beginning AND ending quotations on your dialogue. You've missed this a few times, so I decided to point it out.

    Please don't take offense at this - I'm not trying to flame you. This isn't a flame in any way, shape, or form. I just see a lot of potential in your writing and wanted to help you on your way. Really, the story was excellent over all, and I look forward to reading more.
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  • From ANON - Raquaella on October 08, 2005
    Bloody hell, this story is a work of genius
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  • From ANON - starmay on October 08, 2005
    it's soooooo goood plz update soon
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  • From ANON - Shadow Stealer on October 08, 2005
    There are no words to describe what I feel towards this chapter. The closest I can come to is utterly brilliant.
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