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Reviews for The New Age - (Market Commodity book II)

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From ToonQueen on June 09, 2009
Finally a reply to Rockmuffin:

Thanks for the comment Sunny being cute. :3 Bumblebee is actually my fav char in G1. All three of my clone story lines are actually clones I wish I could have. X3 (Bee, Blurr, and Skywarp.)

As for Sunny and Jess' relationship, I didn't want to do another abusive master. Ironically Abusive = Spark., I wanted to write a bot struggling without having a spark, ;_;
She probably never treated Sunny bad, but more like a fancy computer I suppose.

Snookums gets to rename himself after the 'apocalypse'. :3 I would think many bots with annoying names would change them once sparked and having the chance to.

Andy and Sunny are hinting the Sari and Bee relationship. Of course they would just of been friends when Sari was younger... :3 Due to clone programing he probably couldn't even show an interest in Andy sexually, which makes me watch the ending of this video on repeat and laugh at Andy's future frustrations. X3 http://www.dresdendolls.com/media_site/downloads/dd_coin_480x270.mov

:3 Yay Hot Blurr love. Though Bee is my fave from G1 Blurr was my fave in animated. Kerouac has his own side story I will touch on in a one shot much later... when I'm like half done with Tale of Kaon. I pretty much turn him into an uber smart powerfulish character as the decades go by. I had been considering making him an Eve Spark in the future too... There needs to be an Eve spark from a good situation and not just bad. ;-; He would currently not be an Eve spark now though. (Cuz he doesn't have a spark right now anyways. ;_;) Here is a commish I got of Kerouac, ignore the red symbol on him though, he doesn't get that till later. :3 http://i51.photobucket.com/albums/f385/Pandablubb/commissiontoonqueen4.jpg

When I wrote my part of cameo I saw them in animated style, but with G1 Starscream's colors. Go figure. XD

Next chapter is coming soon. I'm on a two week vacation. X3 I just need to write the smex and then I'll post it. Wheee.
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From ToonQueen on May 15, 2009
Gaaah! They're on the move! *writes her story faster* Poor Flame, kinda. :3 Man if he tells the other punished bots that the smex with Inferno isn't bad at all it'll soon not be a punishment anymore. Kekek.

Thanks for the long reply Rockinmuffin. I'll reply back to yer reply soon. :3
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From Rockinmuffin on May 15, 2009
Review for Fresh Start 5:

Well, I�m glad that the clones had to give consent for the memories to be deleted; I�m a lot less iffy about the issue now. And the fact that Sideswipe was able to manipulate a memory is both exciting and intriguing; especially since it implies that the clones were capable of such levels of imagination straight after being created and, thus, before ever attaining a spark. Very interesting�

That Scream is a hoot and a half! Working up little ol� Flame and then rejecting him in public. xD Really though, that�s what Flame gets for thinking with his port instead of his processor; if he weren�t so desperate for poon then maybe he would�ve realized how suspicious it would be for Scream to come onto him when Scream was the one most furious with him and the others for what they did (though out of the three of them, Flame is the least guilty but guilty nonetheless).

Aww, Inferno, way to be a team player! xD Well, I�m sure that you know how happy I am to see Inferno finally get some action. Seriously though, Inferno has been long overdue for some lovin�. The poor guy has NEEDS, damnit, and they must be FULFILLED. xD Lol. Seriously, all he really needs is a little love and snugglin� and compassion. Which makes me wonder; how has Inferno been holding out all this time? I mean, Dinobot has gotten himself a lover and apparently is mentoring Scream but we don�t really know much about what Inferno has been doing other than being vaguely informed that he�s helping out with the �colony�. What kind of relationships has he made with clones and humans alike. I mean, obviously he hasn�t been romatically involved with anyone and he has utmost respect for anyone he views as his queen but has he made any friends during his stay or does he concentrate entirely on work? I want to know. :3

Also, I laughed when Inferno saluted just before thrusting inside of Flame. xD He WOULD do that. Haha! And it amuses me endlessly that he screwed Flame while in his ANT form. Now, I love Inferno as much as the next girl (okay, maybe a little MORE than the next girl) but I don�t think even I could do him when he�s an ant. Though, admittedly it�s a funny thought. But, hey, at least now Inferno has gained some (well-deserved) popularity!

Oh Lord� Scream, you are such a whore dyke. xD Seriously, that silly slut is quite the home-wrecker, ain�t he?

Wow, I can�t believe that Book II is practically over (though, thankfully, ToonQueen still has some contributions to make to this section). I must say, I�m excited to see what Book III of this saga shall hold. I can�t wait to be introduced to new clones and new humans, not to mention the chances of meeting up with more infected clones. Very promising.

Heh� Bet you didn�t think that the story would evolve this much when you wrote that first little introductory chapter of Market Commodity. ^_~

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From Rockinmuffin on May 07, 2009
Review for Sunny�s Story 1/5:

Sunny is so cute! You know, I used to be kind of annoyed by Bumblebee but recently (because I�ve read so many good stories written about him) I�ve started to really like the character. He grows on you; like a fungus. xD Lol. But, really, you make Sunny so gosh-darn cute!

Sunny�s interactions with �his children� were so fun. I love how he kind of adopts them all since he�s always watching them for his master. *Shakes fist at Jessica* And yet, I still can�t really bring myself to hate her. She�s neglectful rather than abusive, and while it can be just as bad, it shows she doesn�t really intend to be mean. She�s just a very irresponsible person and views the clone �bots as nothing more than machines and wires, which is a sentiment many people believe.

One of my favorite scenes was when Bumblebee went to go protect his children from the bully. AND THE WASP CLONE! Oh, God� Snookums?! *Snorts* That�s the greatest thing I�ve ever heard. EVER. It makes me wonder if pets ever feel indignant with the names that humans give them.

I thought it was cute how Andy and Bumblebee interacted too. At first I thought these two might become a couple, especially after Bumblebee called her, but after the scene with the Blurr clone I�m not so sure now. Still, I think those two have some potential when Andy is old enough to be out of school. ;) But, even if they never �hook up� they make great friends.

By the way, Sunny�s more-than-enthusiastic urge to explore the human body: is this perhaps an allusion to a relationship between the real Bumblebee and Sari? *Wiggles eyebrows*

Oh and FYI, the scene with Sunny and Kerouac? Hot. I love Blurr, thus, I love Blurr clones. And it�s great how he and his owner consider each other wife and husband; and, apparently they have a fairly open relationship since Kerouac didn�t feel any guilt over pursuing another clone. Of course, because of you, now I�m going to think of unicorns every time I see Blurr. xD Lol.

Well, the cameos of �those two� were unexpected but amusing. They�re always causing trouble no matter what universe they�re in. Funny thing is, since this universe is Animated centric, I saw Starscream as his Animated counterpart and the Sideswipe clone based off of an Animated design that someone fanart-ed for him. Made me happy.

Very nice! I can�t wait to see the next chapter, especially Sunny�s feature in the magic show! xD

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From Rockinmuffin on May 07, 2009
Review for Fresh Start 4:

Oh my goodness! Torie, you better keep your future daughters in sight at all times or Flame is going to take them! xD I don�t know why I�m so amused by the thought of Storm waiting around for Torie�s daughters to grow up. I got an image in my head, taken from a scene of Family Guy with Flame replacing Quagmire:

�So, how old are you?�
�16.�
�18?�
�MOM!�
�I like were this going!�

Heh� I knew those twins would find a way to do it. xD

Hmm� The zygote-spark theory you�ve developed is interesting. Odd, but interesting. Also, Groove is adorable and I want to adopt him so we can throw dance parties every night. :D And Screamer makes such a nice mommy!

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From ToonQueen on May 07, 2009
**Fresh Start 4***

Wow! Hot! :3 I like how the twins figured out some "plug and play." Kekeek, When I realized what they were doing I was all YAAAAAAAAY! I don't usually do plug and play for my Transformers Animated universe stories, but when I was a wee ToonQueen I wrote Bots Masters stories with such. X3 Fun times.

Starscream with the other bots was nice. ;_; Sweet Comfort Sex.
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From Rockinmuffin on April 21, 2009
Review for Fresh Start 3:

Go Torie! Tell that beautiful mutha� fucka� who�s boss! Too bad Flame is too much of a self-absorbed prat to actually take her words into consideration. Lol. But at least she has Storm to back her up. And, shit, as much as I�m pissed at Jester, you still have to feel for a guy that has his mech-hood ripped right from his body. Yeowch.

I liked the explanation you used for why the clones received the punishment that they did. Made it seem much more mature rather than just having them humiliated by being screwed by Inferno (though I still can�t seem to consider that a punishment. ;3 Mmm, Inferno.)

The memory echo deletion seems a bit odd to me. I mean, I know that they think it is for a good reason but I just don�t think it�s right for them to do it without proper consent, especially since this group is all about equal rights for the clones and letting them know that they are sentient beings. Oh well. I mean, I do understand the reasoning, but still�

�I bet Flame won�t mess with Storm again any time soon. :D Not only did he endure the flight from hell, he also got burned! xD Sucka�.

Torie and Storm are so cute. They�re one of my favorite couples in this story. And I liked the awkwardness between them; made everything more realistic.

It�s funny; just as Storm and Torie started �getting it on� I started wondering what Flame and Jester were up to and decided that they were probably under their covers, listening in on the couple and touching themselves. And, what do you know, by the end of the chapter they�re peeping Toms. Close enough, eh? Still, that must be torture having people having sex that close to them and knowing that they can�t do the same, though I�m sure Jester and Flame will still manage to interface with each other despite their punishment. Jester didn�t hang out with Scream�s lesbian friends for nothing. :P Lol.

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From ToonQueen on April 16, 2009
**Trouble 3***

Scream :C I literally gasped when reading when I saw he had his stutter again. ;_; Poor cloneeeee. Interesting punishment. I did feel sorry for Flame when he was punished. :C Since he has a background of being abused too, it just, oh man. :C Eye for an Eye doesn't always work, man. :C :C :C :C :C
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From Rockinmuffin on April 15, 2009
I do agree with Pax though on the issue she brought up. While we may feel that it is righteous and deserved, the thought of a group of adults discussing a punishment for rapists and coming up with what they did seems rather� innappropriate? I can�t really think of the right word. It�s like trying to put out a fire with another fire.

I still think the punishment is fun though, but that�s due to my unhealthy love for Inferno. Perhaps, while the clones are going through this punishment, you could have some of the other characters mentioning what Pax said. With such an odd punishment system, there must be some people who question how it works and if what they�re doing is really right.

�I still love this story. :D Just think Pax brought up a really good point.

*Molests Inferno* >:3

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From Rockinmuffin on April 15, 2009
Review for Trouble 3:

Oh my; this is probably one of the darkest story arcs of the Market Commodity universe, perhaps even more so than the Insanity Arc in the original Market Commodity.

Also, I�m still trying to decide whether or not Keke terrifies me or makes me happy. And Poet is just plain adorable. Makes it hard to imagine how many people hold an irrational hate for Wheelie when you see this adorable clone of him.

Oh God, the punishment. xD Why do I find this so hot? Then again, Inferno is my favorite Beast Wars character (rivaled only by Blackarachnia in my mind). Personally, I think he�s hot. xD I guess blind, stupid loyalty is just a turn on for me; that�s why I like Cyclonus anyway. >.> Haha! I don�t know what those mechs are complaining about; I�d fuck Inferno in a heat-beat. Lol. Glad to see the fire ant is getting some attention. ^_~

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From Pax on April 15, 2009
Also, how is this going to affect the sparkling/baby that's currently developing inside Scream. I know too much stress on a mother when she's pregnant can lead to miscarriage. I just hope nothing horrible happens...
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From Pax on April 15, 2009
Oh wow I missed a lot! Took me nearly half an hour to catch up on everything and let me say I am with everybody else in not being happy with Jester and Bond, I just don't see how raping the rapists will help any though. Humiliation breeds anger and certainly won't help Bond with his sadistic issues or help Jester and Flame understand that what they was done was unacceptable. I just don't get the whole punishment system you have going on, but that might just be me. I don't think they realize just how horribly they hurt Jinx, especially with how skittish the Wheeljack clone is about clone/clone interfacing. I just hope they're able to get the poor clone feeling comfortable again.

Scream's relapse is most disturbing, hopefully Poet, Charge, Doc and Dinobot will be able to help him straighten out again.
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From Rockinmuffin on April 10, 2009
I second ToonQueen's idea. >:D
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From ToonQueen on April 10, 2009
Wow, touching scene about the babies might not make it. :C I'm sure they will though, ;-; I hope! Leads me to say Vishal was 'born' before the disaster of course. I still don't know if he's a small child or a young teen at this time though. X_X;;;

I think a good punishment for Bond would be... seeing if there is some way to put the pleasure programs in overdrive, and actually have him in a 'heat' of sorts, but with everyone denying hims release. XD I'm mean. :3 To make things worse, he doesn't know it, but self gratification will only put the programs in overdrive more. :3 Kekeke.

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From Rockinmuffin on April 10, 2009
I�m not sure if I�ve even reviewed a single chapter for this story and that makes me sad. I think this is another interesting world you�ve created and I�m glad to be reading about it. Very glad. I�d go into detail about all the wonderful things in this story but that would take up 3 pages of reviews (at least) and 3 hours of my time. Instead, I�ll just review the most recent chapters.

I�m very mad at Jester and Bond. Bond is a thug and doesn�t know any better yet but Jester has been around long enough to know not to pull that shit. You�d think living with Scream would be enough to convince a guy that RAPE is BAD but I guess Sideswipe clones are just prone to be slow. >.> Flame, well, I guess he�s just a slut. Lol. Seriously though, those guys are on my naughty list and getting coal for Christmas.

Oh, God, Keke� I don�t know whether I like him or whether I�m afraid of him. xD

And Scream and TC are preggers! D�awww! They gonna� have wittle beastie babies!

Also, can I tell you how happy I am that you brought in elements from Beast Wars? I grew up with that show as a child and loved it even before I realized it was a part of the Transformers franchise. Dinobot�s snarls and growls in the middle of his speech make me giggle. And� could I request that Inferno gets some action from one of the girls? I don�t really care who; I just want ant-man to get some love. He�s my favorite character ever. :3 Yes, I know, I�m a freak.

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