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Reviews for Disclosure & Interloper

By : Lennoxmacduff
  • From Frank on June 26, 2019

    Frankly I was looking forward more to this being about Pacifica and Dipper that Wendy or other girls. I just really prefer Pacifica better, both in design and personality, over the other female characters of GF. Well, I like Mabel too, but this story is a little more grounded on logic rather that your usual smut where characters just go at it for no rhyme or reason. So I wouldn't see a reason for Dipper to suddlenly want to be interesed in his sister like that when this isn't that sort of smut. But even so, I still would prefer Pacifica over Mabel, but anyhow, it's your story so I can't tell you how to go about it. But, I do really enjoy this regardless so, thanks for putting such hard work into writing all of this for our enjoyement. Looking forward to next chapter!


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  • From FairySlayer on June 21, 2019

    (for chapter 3... Interloper part 2, that is)

    It was terrific to see Wendy get in on the action, especially with Pacifica getting to call the shots because of Wendy's mistake. Along with the sexy action, I love the way you revealed the little blonde's ulterior motive... and how it backfired on her a bit as she tried to "take it all" (figuratively).

    Unfortunately though, I felt that Dipper went somewhat out-of-character when she went too far and that kind of killed the mood for me (as well as it should have for all of them, IMO); Wendy's plan didn't seem natural to me, as it was kind of cruel towards Dipper in its own way; and while it worked out fine in the end, that stretch felt awkward. Maybe if there had been a way for Pacifica to show her contrition (even if she refuses to apologize) probably would have let me feel better about the end.

    Still, I'm happy that they all got to spend some sexy time together, especially after Wendy's little confession and how it affected Pacifica so nicely. More so, I still love the way you are focusing on Pacifica's needs, fears, defense mechanisms, etc. as a main driver of the story. Anyway, good to know that there are more play-dates in store. Thanks for more fun with the cute couple and friends.


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  • From toonguy on June 17, 2019

    Enjyoing the story so far. I REALLY hope you include anal in a future chapter if that's ok.


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  • From FairySlayer on March 11, 2019

    I really enjoy this tale so far (up to chapter 2/Interloper part 1 – that's going to be a bit confusing though). Without delving hard into spoiler territory, it's terrific that you managed to portray Dipper's anxiety and over-thinking exceptionally well: It comes up at the right times and for the right reasons and adds a nice bit of tension, but it never turns into a miserable angstfest (which is way overdone in GF fanfic) or otherwise gets in the way of telling a good story. Also, you did a fantastic job on the subtleties, making it seem like Dipper sensed something as Pacifica talked to him yet never needing to call attention to it; also, it's great to see Dipper getting some respect for what he does have, which lets some of the teasing seem more playful than mean-spirited. (Mmm, firm muscles…)

    Pacifica plays very well too, showing a nice dichotomy in her personality without ever pretending to be someone else. Again, subtlety plays nicely into the idea that Dipper embracing her good side when she showed her real self (or the person she wants to be). Also, excellent job on describing her, whether naked sexy body in full action, clothing, little affects, etc. With both kids being so much themselves even as they explore a sexual relationship it all feels very natural, and I'm rooting for them.

    Wendy's arrival and the little bits of conflict playing out within Pacifica is fun, and nice to see Wendy also not being too awed while Pacifica feels the need to be in control while also keeping her promise to Dipper (which in itself is a sweet bit of honesty). Of course, now I'm dying to see how things escalate.

    Thanks for pointing this one out, on top of doing a terrific sexy fun job. I'll be checking for the third part.


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  • From TheAllSeeingEye on December 30, 2018

    if wendy is joining can mable join to?


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