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By : DoctorYnot
  • From RandomReviewer on February 02, 2020

    Holy hell, I think I felt my heart skip a beat when I saw this updated! I read the pastebin, thank you for your kind words. I actually had to take a break from this chapter when Lincoln read the DMZ headline, the anxiety was real XD. Hopefully they don't read that trash in Royal Woods, or else Rita (and Lori? Luna? Who else did Leni tell about her un-sisterly feelings?) would have a coronary. Also Linc's phone call with Emily was pretty funny, especially the 'No pulling out when you're sleeping with your sister' comment :D.

    I want you to know I literally exclaimed aloud when I read that you plan to continue this story- it's a hell of a feeling to go from expecting an Epilogue to learning this is the halfway mark. I eagerly await the next chapter of FTttL, or MIWC, whatever comes first they're both ace.


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  • From ANON - Grey on February 02, 2020

    ... Amazing. Truly a crafted masterpiece, the way you capture the emotions and complexity of their relationship, masterful. May you continue to grace the internet with such treasures always.


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  • From ANON - KoPeT on July 04, 2019

    Amazing story... I find myself between wishing this is the end and wishing to see a next chapter... I really have begun to love your writing style, not only long but descriptive of what happens with every character. It's really like someone that truly knows the characters that are written and not only observes. Hope to see more!


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  • From Bmack on March 12, 2019

    Defiantly the best lenicoln fic I’ve read.

    Like to know if you will update or not?


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  • From RandomReviewer on January 03, 2019

    Just read your review from 10/30, I am happy to see that you intend to continue FTTtL. I agree that if you had posted your message as a new chapter it would've been a let down for everyone expecting an update (IE me). I am looking forward to what you come up with next!


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  • From DoctorYnot on October 30, 2018

    Hey there everyone. This is a super indelicate way of communicating but I can't think of any other besides making a new chapter, and I didn't want to trick you into thinking there was an update. I just wanted to tell you how much I appreciate all of your kind words (I'll thank you all more deeply in the author's notes in the next chapter!) and clarify that this story definitely isn't finished yet.


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  • From HappyLookingShell on October 30, 2018

    Is there more?

    An epilogue?

    Interview with the stewardess? fling with the actress?

    I feel like i'm looking for the last dark chocolate in my candy bag.


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  • From GeorgeGlass on April 08, 2018

    Chapter 5:

    It's been over a week since I read this chapter, but I haven't had a chance to post a review until now. So here we go.

    Favorite descriptions:
    --"His mouth went dry, and getting the words to rumble out from his chest was like pushing a broken cart down rusty tracks."
    --"the faultless, undisturbed blue of Leni's eyes"
    --"his index finger gently rubbing a circle over where her womb would be" (I found this very erotic, probably because I'm turned on by the idea of Lincoln knocking Leni up.)
    --The "like a key into a lock" simile is lovely, because it implies that these two are meant to fit together.

    Other bits I liked:
    --Leni's line, "We've been taking it slow our whole lives" made sense and yet seemed plausible for her. And her next line, "I want to take it fast," was hot. :-)
    --I particularly liked the erotic detail of Leni getting turned on when she feels the chip of Lincoln's tooth on her nipple, making it clear that it's not merely the act but the fact that Lincoln is performing it is really what is turning her on.
    --Leni watching Lincoln's face through her fingers as he pulls her panties off.
    --Leni's perfectly reasonable assumption that Lincoln likes tough girls because of his relationships with Mary and Ronnie Anne.
    --Leni realizing that that aching emptiness she feels when Lincoln pulls out of her is what she's been feeling every day of her life up to that point.

    A couple of other comments:
    --Man, Leni's been carrying a torch for a Lincoln for a long time. It makes me feel bad for her, but it also makes me glad that her deepest wish is finally being fulfilled.
    --You mentioned that you are going to be taking some time off from this story, and I'd like to thank you for choosing such a good place to pause. At this point, you've fulfilled the promise of consummation that has been building over these 5 chapters, so instead of feeling frustrated, I'm merely pleasantly curious about where the story will go from here.


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  • From Trillhouse on March 31, 2018

    Love this story. No lying, it's probably my favorite Loud House fic, and the one above all others that prompted me into writing my own. The slow build and portrayal of Lincoln and Leni's relationship felt natural, as opposed to many other LoudCest fics where it just kind of happens. Overall it leaves me feeling warm and fuzzy, while others are just kind of hot. I can't wait to see the epilogue!


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  • From GeorgeGlass on March 05, 2018

     

    Chapter 4:

    One thing I like about this chapter is that it shows us how much Leni has grown in the past 10 years. In the previous chapters, we saw that Leni the big sister is more or less the same person at age 26 that she was at age 16. But Leni the fashion designer has grown from a semi-competent hobbyist into a professional, and an artist. And I love the way you tie a bow around that by flashing back to Leni's mermaid-themed dress from her youth.

    And now, some random comments:

     

    Favorite lines:

    “All at once the knowledge of where he was, who he was and where he needed to be all came galloping through the foggy morning haze like the horsemen of the apocalypse.”

    “The name's Bond.”

    “The same person sucking up to him had mistaken him for a lost daylaborer not an hour ago, trying to shoo him out of the hotel by claiming there was a payphone down the street he could use if he needed to 'call one of his cousins to pick him up'.”

     

    Questions that arose:

    --The line about Lincoln being treated like a hobo just for working a day in his life brought to mind a question: What is Lincoln doing with his life, when he's not helping out Leni? Chapter 1 mentions “studying” and “trying to find a real job,” but that seems to be all we know. This information might not be essential to the plot, but I feel like I need it in order to understand where Lincoln is in his life—and, therefore, what he would be putting at risk if he makes a life-changing decision.

    --Are finishing schools still a thing?

    --Wasn’t it mapled artichoke, not mapled apricots, that Lincoln ate the night before?

     

    Other things I liked:

    --Lincoln falling off the couch--a nicely cartoony opening for the chapter

    --Leni over-explaining her color choices for Lincoln's outfit in her note

    --the old style telephone, as well as Lincoln's confusion when he tries to answer it

    --the name “Bongiorno Valenti,” which made me chuckle

    --that Leni in work mode is a total taskmaster, in contrast to her otherwise usually demure personality

    --Leni modeling the pièce de résistance herself

    --that Lincoln seems to have become a Marco Diaz-esque nice-guy chick magnet

    --when Lincoln suddenly thinks about the fact that Leni designed everything that he is wearing, and the thought makes him feel naked in front of her. I could totally see that.

    --the whole idea of this famous starlet, who is used to being the center of attention, finding herself the third wheel in the conversation between Lincoln and Leni

    Looking forward to reading chapter 5!


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  • From GeorgeGlass on February 16, 2018

    And now to bombard you with comments about chapter 3.

    Descriptive bits I particularly liked:
    --"Byzantine circles of exclusivity"
    --"His quiet outrage did not seem to be entirely an affectation."

    Great pieces of Leni dialogue:
    --"He's totes trying to seduce me." Leni always seems to know what to say to achieve maximum awkwardness. :-)
    --"And circle the stuff we can share!" Great Leni line--totally inappropriate but very sweet.
    --Replying to Lincoln's question, "Could you see if there's a blanket in there?" with "There isn't, but it's okay. I won't hog the covers." What a perfect way to illustrate how differently Lincoln and Leni understand the sleeping arrangements.
    --I liked that you followed up Leni's line, "It doesn't matter where we go, it'll totes feel special as long as you're there with me" with "Only Leni could say something like that with total sincerity." Absolutely true.

    Other comments:
    --I went “awww” when Lincoln unconsciously reached down and took Leni's hand in the car.
    --I like that Leni obviously wants to treat Lincoln as her boyfriend but still has enough sense to know that it's not appropriate -- unless, of course, no one around them knows that they're siblings.
    --I was a little confused by this bit: "He couldn't remember the last time he'd seen Leni so happy. She was outright vivacious. It was like the last three years had never happened. His stomach churned when he thought about it." What was the "it" that made his stomach churn--the events of the last three years, or Leni's having seemingly forgotten them?
    --I like the concept of the grandmother with the basket of roses, not selling them but giving them to men she believes are in love.
    --I also like the way that you describe the grandmother as being like an elderly version of Lucy. That conveys a lot of description in just a few words.
    --The moment with the rose was suspenseful. The whirling thoughts in Lincoln's head are portrayed very well. And I really had no idea how it was going to end. And of course, afterward, you're left wondering what the old lady saw in Lincoln that made her think he was in love with Leni, and whether she was right.
    --I love your three-dimensional take on Leni. She may be dumb as a rock in an intellectual sense, but her capacity for empathy is off the charts. That's very true to the character.
    --The callback to North of Northampton and Lincoln's use of vocabulary from that movie was great. It reminded me of that scene in Splash where John Candy is able to say in Swedish, "Hey babe, I've got a twelve-inch penis" because he has watched enough Swedish porn to pick it up.
    --It's interesting that at some point in the past, Lincoln's sisters were taking turns sharing his bed, and that Rita apparently was okay with that. I'm wondering if this was soon after their father died, when the normal rules of the household might have been relaxed a little to help the kids deal with their grief.
    --Lincoln's semi-conscious kiss of Leni was a great way to end the chapter.

    Looking forward to reading on!


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  • From GeorgeGlass on February 09, 2018

    I’ve finished chapter 2, and I shall now bombard you with seemingly random comments.

    First, there were a lot of descriptions and phrases I liked, including
    --The “ping pong ball” simile you use to describe Lincoln's discomfort with being caught between Leni and the stewardess
    --“millimetrically precise”
    --The nicely erotic description of the drop of water coursing down Leni’s face, neck, and chest
    --Most of all, the description of Leni's outfit. That “flowed down her body like ink” description is positively sumptuous.

    Second, there was some great Leni dialogue:
    --When she blithely mentions that all the Loud sisters had their first kiss with Lincoln, having no clue how humiliating her confession will be for him. Plus, it's kind of hot. :-)
    --“I don't want any suckers.”
    --Not wanting to leave the hotel in the same outfit she wore coming in because she might get arrested. I was like, wait a minute, does Leni think the fashion police are a real thing? And, of course, she does. 
    --Leni's subsequent statement that New York City probably has “fashion SWAT” made me LOL (and imagine Shemar Moore tackling Leni and telling her that her shoes are SO last season). 😊

    Other comments:
    --Ossu is a colorful character who seems well suited to a Loud House fic.
    --Fact check: I don't think Napoleon ever invaded India. In fact, he tried to ally with some of the Indian princes against the British.
    --I'm curious: Is Lincoln's ex Jordan the “girl-Jordan” from the show? It wouldn't surprise me, given that Lincoln seems to have a thing for girls who like to beat on him (with dodge balls, in girl-Jordan's case).
    --I would have liked some explanation of why their mother was adamantly against Lincoln moving in with Leni, or at least, what she claimed her reason was. Given that Lincoln and Leni are both adults now, they could have chosen to move in together anyway, so their mother’s argument against it must have been at least somewhat compelling.

    Thanks for a couple of good chapters, and I’m looking forward to reading on.
     


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  • From RandomReviewer on February 03, 2018

    I meant to ask, is there any meaning to the title "Fashion (Turn To The Left!)"?


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  • From Potayto444 on January 10, 2018

    Out of your three stories, this one is number three on the list for me, as good as it is. I do like it though, quite a lot.

    It’s a very realistic, original idea. I always appreciate that.

    Lincoln was done in an interesting way. It really felt like I was reading the thoughts of what would be a grown up version of the boy we all know and love. Most good LH stories set in the future tend to stray quite far from the origin, which drastically changes the characters, especially and always Lincoln. This story is easy to imagine, in a vivid likeness to the show. You didn’t skip a beat. Jumping right into the drama. That helps, because it stops us readers from having to create and fill empty voids, solidifying the realism.

    My favorite part of this story is how you handled the rest of the family. Keeping everything regarding the family vague was a good choice. It kept the story tight and personal. You have just the right amount of knowledge to make it seem like they’re still there. For example, Lincoln comparing the Italian rose lady to his sister Lucy; even though we never saw Lucy, it was refreshing it was there. I was really impressed by this. Of course, this could drastically change in the end, as you haven’t finished the story yet of course.

    Poor Leni. Such innocence, with so much pain and misunderstanding. She was noticeably smarter in this than normal and in the show, but it was needed, and done well. How you kept having Lincoln think things like “Leni needs help. Maybe she doesn’t though,” or things like that, made it even more acceptable.

    The scene with Rita, discussing things over with Lincoln was quite beautiful. It was heart wrenching in a weird way. It wasn’t overly emotional, but the context gave it the feeling that it was. It was so intimate. Knowing Lynn Sr. passed, and hearing how it impacted the family, and still does was a nice touch.

    The main event sure was something. Lincoln’s suit was a very nice extra little plot point. When his “crush” was one of the gossipers, I was shocked and had a good laugh. Delving into her own emotional state and thought process, even her past was what puts your stories over the top. It’s something most authors wouldn’t think of doing, not at the amount you did it, and it was fantastic. I really appreciate that kind of thoughtfulness in stories. Getting back on topic, Leni and Lincoln’s whole spat was  pretty intense. Rarely does Leni get genuinely mad, (again, smarter here), but it was interesting.

    The sex scene was good. Lots of nice emotions there. Plain and simple.

    I look forward to see how this will end, and will leave a follow up review when it does.


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  • From RandomReviewer on January 07, 2018

    >senpai noticed me ;o;

    Excellent update! The penultimate love scene between LincxLeni was very hot, 10/10. I'm glad to hear that there is an epilogue chapter on the way, and your writing is so good I am more than willing to wait until after the new "MIWU" drops (especially since I've been looking forward to a new chapter of that since before "Fashion TTTL" was even a thing lol).


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