Reviews for Multiversity

BY : GeorgeGlass

  • From Fairy-Slayer on July 13, 2018

    Sorry for not keeping up on as much of your stories as I'd like, and more so for not giving them the full thoughtful treatment they deserve. However, after several months I finally caught up on "Multiversity" today and I love how it's playing out, especially how Dipper keeps learning a key piece of knowledge about himself – his own universe's self – each step of the way.

    Of course, the deliciously detailed action is pretty lovely too, but the mini-plots for each world and the tension are all top-notch; there are always nice tidbits that foreshadow the little twists very nicely too. Of course, half the time when something makes me raise an eyebrow it turns out not to be a twist at all (like a certain meeting Dipper overheard in chapter 4), but the ones that do appear are very natural for the timelines. Heh, so even in the latest one (9) I already see some potential for a twist, but with the lesson he's learned there it may or may not pan out.

    Anyway, thanks for continuing to write and share so much great stuff. Take care.

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  • From nukerat on July 03, 2018

    is there gonna be a part two with Tiffany?

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  • From DebbieCync on May 12, 2018

    Great story, a nice setup with a satisfying ending.


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  • From all_possible_worlds on September 01, 2017

    *monstrous spoilers for Chapter 6 ahead*

    Darling it's better
    Down where it's wetter
    Take it from me

    I understand why there is no reciprocal oral sex from Dipper's side in this story, given the plot. But at the same time, I feel deprived of the opportunity of humming "under the sea" all through any such a scene ;)

    Also, me reading this chapter: "Why does she have a French accent, and not Spanish like Mermando? (other than a 'Little Mermaid' joke) Oh, that's why! School as in boarding school or as in school of fish? Oh, I see!"

    I practically expected the next line to read "And, yes, [Dexter], I can read your mind" after that point. Kudos.

    Loved the different monster-romantic-interests you gave everyone, from the fact that a red-bearded manotaur counts as an indication that Wendy has daddy-issues, to Robbie dating a yokai, to Thomson's ambiguously-existent date, to the running gag about Pacifica and tentacle porn. At this rate, you better deliver on that last one at some point!

    I wonder if there is any particular significance to the fact that many of these single-fetish universes seem to only apply to teens, not to the adults. I guess all of them have weird consequences once reproduction enters the scene.

    The "that's a little creepy" trio of lines are especially true to character, for both twins.

    So, from very early on, this chapter hinted to be the reverse of Wendip, in that Mermadeline was way more into Dipper than the other way around. Even then, seeing Dipper swim to the middle of the lake with her was a bit unsettling, because, well, not to be specieist, but... mermaid, them folk drown people. Turns out is the other kind of mermaid, the sell your soul for a pair of legs to be with your guy kind, where is Ursula when you need her? But yeah, Dipper is right, scary kind of responsibility there!

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  • From all_possible_worlds on August 29, 2017

    *chapter 5 review, spoilers up to that point*

    I know I usually say you get every character right, but this time I do have to protest!

    How are you so sure, so convinced, so absolutely certain... that in so many years of cons, flimflams, and foul dealings, Grunckle Stan has never been a pimp?!

    Heh, nah, honestly just pulling your leg. The bit about the Grunckle feeling uncomfortable at what he was saying about the kids was pretty good foreshadowing for his eventual acquiescence on the matter, and I can both see that as one the few moral lines he won't quite cross, as well as the twins happiness being among the few things Stan will put above money.

    The bit about "Dipper is Dipper" was also excellently planted just for this sort of occasion, and the "lesson" Dipper learns is disturbing, but believable (and the corollary, that they still care for each other much more that they are into each other, remains heartwarming). The sex was funny (Mabel is Mabel in any universe too, puns and all), and hot, as well as uncomfortable, and I haven't untangled that particular mix. For something that caters to a fetish failing so far from my own repertoire, I couldn't have asked for it to go any better.

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  • From neo on August 24, 2017

    the last 2 chapters were really good!

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  • From all_possible_worlds on August 16, 2017

    *chapter 4 review, spoilers up to that point*

    The dreaded Chapter 4. Incestverse? Pinecestverse?... the Lannisters send their congrats?

    Well, to be fair, I planned to spend this chapter uncomfortably teetering at the edge between disgust and fascination at the particular sub-genre in question. And, don't get me wrong, there was plenty of that, particularly at the end. To your credit as a writer, you gave cannon-Dipper pretty much the only motivation I would believe to overcome his reservations: his desire to protect/help out his sister. Of course, he is also clearly turned on by the situation himself on some level, and I suppose only chapter 5 will tell if those feelings are his own or alt-Dipper's.

    That said, what I didn't expect, was to spend so much of this chapter laughing my ass off, and not only at Dipper's confusion. The whole Pacifica digression was hilarious, of course, but it was this exchange that truly killed me:

    > Soos piped up, “Good thing I’m an only child, huh, Mr. Pines? You don’t have to worry about me getting distracted by the opposite sex.”

    > “I don’t worry about that ever,” Stan replied

    Perfect, for both of them.

    Also, I got why they were the power couple as soon as you begun hinting at it, with the magazine clippings. Like Dipper says, the deduction is fairly easy: the closer the family relation the more popular in the incestverse, same as the younger the guy the more popular in the shotaverse. I recognize that you were guiding the reader to that conclusion way before you put it explicitly in Dipper's thoughts, but you still managed to make me feel smart when you confirmed the obvious suspicions. Like you said one time "One of the signs of a good writer is the ability to subtly get you thinking in a certain direction and then, while you're still thinking, take you in that direction.", so, in that regard at least, masterfully done! ;)

    Now, can we please learn whichever life lesson this universe is supposed to teach Dipper, so that we can get to sex scenes that do *not* end in "Thanks, Bro-Bro."

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  • From shadowmaster on August 16, 2017

    Not what I expected..... *cringe* But if you like it like that, I will respect your decision..... But really, I want to see a Tambry x Wendy x Dipper (very explicit..... XD)

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  • From nukerat on August 16, 2017

    well the entire human gene pool is doomed

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  • From Dskull on August 14, 2017

    Oh man, you really captured the essence of Grunkle Stan there. And I'm hyped for next chapter too.

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  • From all_possible_worlds on August 11, 2017

    *massive spoilers for Chapter 3*

    Poor Dipper. Anyone else would be pretty happy with being friends with benefits with Wendy Corduroy for two summers, but Dipper is not just hot for her, he is truly and well in love, and unfortunately, she is not, in any universe. I like how his memories of that reality really didn't help him realize that was the catch, mostly because alter-Dipper also didn't realize, and was willfully deceiving himself. The foreshadowing with the soda gesture was brilliant. I sort of intuited it might be heading that way when she didn't remember the detail that had so much significance to Dipper, although one could also interpret it as Dipper being in general more given to notice details than Wendy. Actually, I kinda expected a worse outcome. Something like Wendy being the type of girl to never call after they have done it and Dipper feeling used. Your version still paints Wendy a lot more sympathetically. At worst, she let Dipper deceive himself. At best, she honestly thought he knew what the deal was. Which makes sense, if she is roughly the same character as in cannon, modulo the werid world-wide fetish.

    The sex scene was both pretty darn hot and super fun in how it plays around with the usual expectations. For example, Wendy being turned on by Dipper exaggerating his age... downwards, and this gem of a line: "Yes, baby, keep sucking, suck them for me, it feels so good..." Somehow Wendy sounds like a male pornstar there, and since it is Wendy Corduroy we are talking about, I am not 100% sure that's due to the shotaverse.

    Also, remember how you always get your protagonists ridiculously in character even as you are making children cartoon characters star in a porno? Well...

    > Jeez, he thought. I’m second guessing my second guessing. I’m third guessing myself.

    That, right there, is Dipper in a nutshell! Kudos. And, of course, similarly:

    > “State law says I have to give you thirty minutes,” the old man replied. “So I’ll give ya fifteen. I call that a reasonable compromise.”

    Is the most Grunkle-stanish thing I can imagine.

    By the way, I thought we both agreed Grunkle Stan's sex life in the shotaverse was something no one should have to think about. The idea of Stan getting it on with catheterized nonagenarians is definitely not a mental picture I needed. And I am already bracing myself for dreaded Chapter 4... "Oh boy" indeed. But if it is this early in the line-up, then it cannot be the fic's conclusion (my money is on Dipcifica only because you brought her up on Chapter 1, then again, I know that's what you want us to think... Mmmm... plots within plots).

    Also, I kind of imagine your Aphrodite singing this when she answers the phone, but in a bored nasal tone:


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  • From shadowmaster on August 09, 2017

    Hey, pretty cool chapter. Thanks for making a fanfic that includes Dipper (as we know him) with Wendy. Very in character everything (Dipper behavior, Wendy's, etc). Also, meanwhile tragic the ending for any fan of DipperxWendy, it is believable that even with that little change (girls liking younger boys) Wendy would reject Dipper. I mean, this is not because of age (three years is not that much of a difference nowadays).Wendy likes Dipper, but I think that unless some changes (for any author), it would be difficult to find a reason for her loving him like that..... 


    I know that this is too much to ask, but could you make a long omake (I know they are short, but I am already asking, so why not asking for longer) of a threesome between Dipper with Tambry and Wendy..... XD

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  • From Dskull on August 02, 2017

    Very nice, what I wouldn't give for a world like that.

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  • From all_possible_worlds on August 02, 2017

    Gotta hand it to old Aphrodite, she doesn't do things halfway. Giving the girl you like the right fetish so that she will go out with you is one thing, but giving that same fetish to the entire universe? Whoa! (and yes, I know she is just sending him to a pre-existing reality where that is the case already, infinite chickens crossing infinite roads and all that, but she could still have sent Dipper to a closer reality. You know, one in which his sister is not also creeping on little kids... ).

    Speaking of which, creeper Mabel is just perfect! She is in-character-modulo-universe, since canon Mabel is the queen of creepy crushes. Is just that it becomes so much more disturbing in the "Straight 'Shooting'" reality (loved the pun when she mentioned it, and did a double take when I saw the Chapter title the second time and now got the joke). And, since we are talking about people who are in character, this is the first line in the chapter that made me laugh aloud: "and Thompson was…still Thompson, apparently." Poor Thompson. Not only is he still single in this reality, but his social situation is likely particularly awkward since it means he mostly hangs around boys much younger than him and their dates, rather than with guys his own age. I also like that Dipper, despite his apparent good luck, is already suspicious of the Gravity Fall weirdness in question, even when it is benefiting him this time.

    Third line that made me laugh aloud: "Spackler’s Underground Pest Poison: For Moles, Voles, or Whatever Lives in Holes.", specially when billed as gnome repellant. No big profound reason, it was just hilarious. The second line was Mabel's title drop, btw.

    Regarding the, right now very incipient, smut, I like how Dipper is super nervous, and apparently was super nervous too in the past of this reality. I also enjoy how Wendy would be a pretty, well, gentlemanly?/romantic?/sweet?, in the more conventional case where the genders were reversed and the ages of both were bumped a bit higher, since she is taking care to make Dipper's first time special. In general, this chapter had me thinking about which social conventions would change and which would remain the same in a world were it was the norm for the girl to be the older one (ok, and fine, I am imaginning this stuff being more 15 to 17 than 12 to 15 because... eeh... despite the fact that I have both read and written worse :p). Does the change also make the girl the one who initiates/escalates by default? Does that make guys more wary about potentially pushy girls? (not just in the 'Mabel going after way-too-young kids' case, but also like, even Robbie and co. if their dates turn out to be less considerate than Wendy seems to be so far with Dipper...).

    Also, Grunkle Stan's encounter with the Hand-Witch in this reality is something I am not sure if I am either curious about, or, more likely, really really don't want to know about ;)

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  • From nautiscarader on July 30, 2017

    Oh. My. God. If you write a Wendip story, I will praise you unto high heavens, man. 

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