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Reviews for The Mating Process

By : Kuronohime
  • From WritingDude on April 10, 2016
    To be honest, this story wasn't that good; there are a lot of problems in terms of the grammar and storytelling. While the grammar errors were few and in between, the way the story is told isn't very interesting, let alone accurate. Post-movie Jane speaks fluently with Terk and Tantar for example and she doesn't were boots or a hat. The sex scene is almost none existent; first rule about writing is "show, don't tell." Don't just tell the reader what's going on in a story, describe it and give clear cut details as to what's happening. I'd consider giving this story a rewrite when you get the chance.
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