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Reviews for Fistbump 2: Unspeakable (a Pinecest story)

By : Edward_or_Ford
  • From ANON - kojivsleo on August 13, 2015
    I believe we have reached peak angst, hopefully it starts to normalize back to lower levels of it.
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  • From ANON - ForgetMeNaught on August 12, 2015
    I like this direction. Good ploy with the head injury, Mr. Ford.
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  • From xXDasXGoochXx on August 09, 2015
    Christ bro. you make a man not want incest. lol
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  • From ANON - ForgetMeNaught on August 07, 2015
    Good to see chapter 7 at long last. Welcome back.

    I love the formatting choices you made; good way to sprinkle in extra background without needing to add more day to day interaction. It was telling, though, how rushed this chapter was, and in the end it didn't really feel like we went anywhere compared to chapter 6, if I may say. It seemed as if you couldn't wait to get the chapter out of the way as opposed to not being able to wait to show it off.

    As for that tension, I dig where it's going. Bottle that stuff and use it full force.
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  • From FairySlayer on June 10, 2015
    You claim it's very angsty but I find it well balanced, with some great character growth and development, really good situations and dialogue (including the internal dialogue), plus some really good hot sex scenes. Sure, the bumps are a bit painful, but they do make for a better story. I have to feel bad for Dipper though because he seems to take the brunt of things a bit more. (Less than average penis, premature ejaculation, almost bipolar impulsive/frozen behavior...)

    Anyway, it's a captivating story, very interesting and even fun as the twins go up and down the very dangerous rollercoaster that is their romantic love. Then there's the real fun, like the end of chapter 5 and the nice wind-up for Dipper's plan in six. Keep up the great work.

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  • From ANON - kojivsleo on May 27, 2015
    Dipper you idiot! Well here comes the angst you promised, but hopefully it doesn't go into stupid levels like the show Supernatural has.
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  • From xXDasXGoochXx on May 24, 2015
    wow...who knew wincest could be so complicated.
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  • From ANON - Anon on May 24, 2015
    It can't be over Dipper tell your parents
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  • From Belfry on May 20, 2015
    OH NO! It's cold! It's cruel! Just ten more seconds!
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  • From xXDasXGoochXx on May 18, 2015
    you should totally pick up the tely becaus i fuckin called it!

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  • From ANON - kojivsleo on May 16, 2015
    Nice to see that unlike some stories they're trying to talk their problems out and try to solve the issue instead of tying to deny it exist.
    question, did you ever get those stories I sent to you, and have you made up your mind about posting on fanfiction?
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  • From xXDasXGoochXx on May 15, 2015
    Ah good job on another chapter.
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  • From ANON - Anon on May 15, 2015
    It's sweet they will be able to go back to their love making
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  • From ANON - ForgetMeNaught on May 12, 2015
    Beautiful ideas are present here throughout, Mr. Ford. I applaud your courage for turning toward angst instead of sickly sweet romance; you'll be pleasantly rewarded for that path here as much as you were in Fistbump the original.

    Just a quick note though: you've taken to using page breaks, which is good for pacing your story, but you don't need to use page breaks when flipping between character perspectives when they're the main characters and in the same room at the same time. Again, just a note.
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  • From ANON - kojivsleo on May 08, 2015
    Ouch, right in the feels...
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