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By : MichaelATownshed
  • From SWK on May 07, 2015
    You lost me on this chapter man... not as a reader of course. You just made me lose myself on what was going on. I though that I had it, but I clearly didn't. I'm slow clapping to you, man. I'm slowly clapping to you...

    Especially because Wendy's scene doesn't make sense, but in the good way. It can be taken in so many ways, she's hallucinating, she can also be dreaming, or she could be actually suffering that at the hands of Stan, or an unknown element. She had asked even if mentally for Stan to rape her, to take her by force if necessary. And that was exactly what happened.

    So it might be an stance of be careful of what you wish for... but then there are some clues that this might be psychological or mental attack, Waddles scene gives some credence to the belief that there is a psychic attack involved, which could or not be using Wendy's desires against her...

    In the end, damn, there are far too many possibilities to take one... which is again, a certainly good job from your part.

    On the other hand... you left us hanging on the Twincest... don't be mean... we want Twincest!!!
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  • From Latham02 on April 18, 2015
    That last chapter was well written and suspenseful, but I honestly don't know where this story is going at this point, and you can take from that what you will. But whatever happens, I hope that the next chapter doesn't have another weird dream.
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  • From PseudoFace34 on April 17, 2015
    I'm kind of disgusted of chapter 3 but the story seems pretty good.
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  • From xXDasXGoochXx on April 15, 2015
    A second time reading this and i think I might... still be completely confused.


    my guess? some spirit/dream eating/ lustful monster has invaded the dreams and minds of Mabel, Wendy and Pacifica. taking from each something? i imagine the next chapter being about pacifica. and for wendy's "death" just another horrible "dream"

    or the magic affected Stan and sent him on a raping spree.
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  • From ANON - harem lover 26 on April 14, 2015
    Well the mystery deepens. We now know about the black loage, that there are 3 sprites, and something about a ring. I wish we had more details. Also I'm a little surprised that when Waldles, who seems to have mind powers, talked about the towns hidden secrets she should have mentioned the bunker or the Blind Eye group.

    Also I hope you didn't just kill off Wendy she is one of my Farrel charter.
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  • From xXDasXGoochXx on April 14, 2015
    oh wow....that was an amazing bit of work mate. I'm gonna have to read this a few more times to wrap my head around this. great job!
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  • From ANON - Christopher on April 14, 2015
    A good new chapter to the story (chapter 3) but I was going "Wha...." by the end. Hope the next chapter will explain what the hell was happening to Wendy.
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  • From Latham02 on March 11, 2015
    Amazing story so far. You do an incredible job of setting the scene and recreating characters, it is very impressive. Even though it had no smut in it, the first chapter is my favorite so far because I really do think that's how they would react to that situation. Not to mention, it was so funny I could not stop laughing.
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  • From Harem-Lover-26 on March 11, 2015
    Well this is getting intersting.
    From the clues in the chappter it looks like something is possessing Mabel and it wants Wendy.Also it seems that whatever is possessing her is a bit horny. I also think that Pacifica is going to show up and that this is going to become the long awaited Dipper/Harem story, i hope. Lastly it seems that Bill likes to play with his food before finishing them.
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  • From SWK on March 09, 2015
    Great chapter, just adored how well you managed the characters, and the developments. Enjoyed Dipper moment at "Mirror world", and what this might mean for the story in the future. It seems that Mabel is being influenced by the shawl, or what posess the shawl, also... Stan actions are doing some damage or at least, that was what hinted Bill.

    Liked Lebam, and the clues she left there... obviously Bill will sooner or later attempt to kill him and the whole Pines family.

    I'm also concerned, it's obvious that Mabel isn't being herself on her sexual moments, and that she's being influenced... actually I think she's that white rabbit... isn't she?

    Is... Wendy suffering for what had happened? Are the Owls connected to a certain goddess... or maybe something else? Loved how Mabel reasons for wanting to be with Dipper... her reasons are sound... and well... want to know more, will there be other girls influenced by Mabel... will she also use Dipper to please other girls?

    I'm intrigued and quite attracted to this story. I have been writing my own story of Gravity Falls for quite a while but it had been put on hold. Still, I'm quite satisfied with how this story is going, and what elements you're using so far.

    It feels like an episode... So, good job.
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  • From Casey_jones on March 08, 2015
    wow everyone a crazy level of horny. I just hope you share it with some of the other girls.
    Keep the flow going .haha flow
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  • From xXDasXGoochXx on March 08, 2015
    Well then...once again you astound me with your ability to warp this universe. its like i'm watching an episode that was never supposed to air but can be viewed in certain places. excellent job.
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  • From xXDasXGoochXx on March 04, 2015
    read it a second time. this is probably the first time i've ever seen THAT subject in a story...interesting...
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  • From xXDasXGoochXx on March 04, 2015
    ohhh i can taste when somethings about to become faptastically epic. I await the next chapter with baited breath.

    -Marcus Carvalho
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  • From SWK on March 04, 2015
    Interesting I must admit, glad to see that you didn't jumped right on to the sex, and had a plot here. Hope to read more of this in the future.
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