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Reviews for The Twilight Shore

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From ANON - Tiamateraszu on February 26, 2016
great story and hoping you will make an effort to post the remaing 18 chapters
looking forward to when you do
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From ANON - devilking on November 24, 2012
well.... that was different. buwahahah, fbi wont get no, kim pos-i-ble.
i wish you'd write more.... i REALLY do but.... i'll just have to imagen the end.
Drakken starts hunting the pack, the pack joins with Punk's GJ team, together they barely beat Drakken, or maybe bring his previous personality back(then they'd figure out the nanites). then the pack manages to liberate Punk, Punk might get betty emotional. the pack takes over all of seatle. GJ makes a big play against the pack. the pack barely pulls through. the end!

there i finnished the story for you:P. its a pretty crappy ending but hey, never said i was good.
lol but seiously, if your even getting this message i really like this story, and REALLY hope that you finnish it:( even if you make it quick!!! anything to tie up the loose ends :P
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From aeonanything on November 22, 2010
I liked "The Dark Ocean" -a lot- and I was REALLY looking foward to reading the complete "Season 2" (The Twilight Shore) and "Season 3". Do you plan on finishing writing them? Or, if you already have, where could I read them?
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From Alcandre on July 08, 2010
Wow, this is an amazing series. I'm not sure why people haven't reviewed it more. I'm sad to see that this hasn't been updated recently but I still wanted to let you know that I have really enjoyed reading "Dark Ocean" and "The Twilight Shore". The way you have written Kim has really impressed me. A more mature and hard Kim Possible is something that Disney could never do. Well done! I hope you can continue this!
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From Zarrthtion on October 20, 2009
well all i can...say...is..WTF!!!. HOW DO YOU COME UP WITH THIS STUFF LOL ITS AMAZING....i can't wait for more of it
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From feifei08 on February 15, 2009
This is great! finally a sequal!! Update soon, please.
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From Neihaera on October 11, 2008
If you think getting the series on DVD would help, maybe we who are slavering to hear the rest of the tale should take up a collection, pick them up for you, and send FedEx over with them, eh?
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From Neihaera on September 20, 2008
I know it'll never happen, given the copyright issues with the Evil Empire (aka Disney) ... but if this tale did find its way to a bookstore shelf, I'd buy at least a couple copies. God knows there is enough drek out there pretending to be literature, something as well written as this, with characters one can actually care about, SHOULD be up where it can be properly appreciated.
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From firelarc on August 10, 2008
man the first seaosn was awosme i hope this is just as awsome. cant wait to read more
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From AJCMetallica on July 21, 2008
I managed to read this whole story (The Dark Ocean and all the extra side stories too) in about the space of 3 or 4 days a little while back and was really amazed with it. I guess I should apologise for not reviewing and showing my appreciation all those months ago when I first read it. I dropped by to see if you'd updated with a new chapter and now I feel compelled to read it all through again, it really is a wonderful piece of writing.

Even if you don't continue this, I'm really glad you wrote as much as you did and allowed me to read such an awesome story. It has such a different feel to the show (and I'm not just talking about the more obviously adult themes within the story), yet it stays very much true to the characters and that's incredible. Almost everything is beautifully described and I love how you give every character their moments to develop and take the spot light.

Hope you do continue though!
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From veihnchree on February 25, 2008
I was forced to create an account just so I could tell you that your fic is crack. Please do not stop... please, please do not stop.
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From Diamondflame on February 06, 2008
This will be my first(which makes me a little nervous, even is no one reads it), and probably only real review, unless I speak up again after more chapters, or someone makes reference to what I have to say. I've left a couple little "I really like this story" notes before, but this one was great enough I felt I had to leave a few real opinions. I have to include all of the stories in what I guess you would call The Dark Ocean Universe.

1. The thing that made me truly fall in love with these stories is the whole Pack aspect of it. Not sure why I like it so much, maybe because I used to, and still do on occasion, think of myself and others in that same way.(not to that extreme of course)

2. I should say that I'm actually not a fan of the side stories, except Choosing Your Family, they just feel like they're straying to far from the path of the main story to me.

3. I don't want to say it's a bad thing, because I understand why you did it, but I didn't like that Wade didn't stick around, and I think it's weird you haven't brought him back in, in some form, especially when Kim went back to visit her family and friends.

4. This may sound kinda stupid, I read part of the first chapter of The Dark Ocean about 2 weeks ago and stopped because of Drakken's death.(not a big fan of character death in any story) Which is really strange because I didn't really like him coming back either. If I would have remembered it in there, I probably wouldn't have came back and read it again. This time I've read everything posted so far in roughly 3 days.

5. I not a very emotional person, but this story had pulled at the heart strings a bit through out the whole thing. Parts make me happy(nearly cheered when Yori first showed up), parts make me laugh, even nearly brought me to tears at one point.(I actually think that is the best complement I can give your writing ability)

6. Not really part of my review just something that hit me as I was finishing reading this part, It would be really cool if you could find a good artist to make some pictures of this story, like one for each chapter or something. There are a couple moments I would love to see.(like when Kim was trying to save Shego from the Dark Ocean, I have a few others in mind but won't mention them) Any artwork probably wouldn't live up to the story but still would be interesting to see.

7. I clicked the discuss this story thing and discovered that there isn't actually a place to discuss this story in the forums. I think I might just have to change that next time I'm here, I think I'd enjoy chatting with others that enjoyed it or the writer herself.(sorry if your a guy, but something about the story makes me think a woman wrote it)

Those points are in no particular order by the way, that's just how they popped into my head. I guess that's all I got for now, didn't think I actually had this much to say and still I fell like I'm not saying enough. I would like to leave more constructive thoughts then this, but nothing is coming to mind at the moment. All I can say now is hurry and post more(so I can read more), don't just stop and give up the story, and thanks for writing it.

Diamondflame
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From fuzzibare on December 21, 2007
"Season 2" opens with a Bang! Still has the emotional connection that Dark Ocean did, and the fight scenes are quite cinematic (my opinion). Good scene descriptions & dialog too.
I keep wondering what it might take to get through Betty Director's emotional barriers; if anything can. I like the way Punk has a bit of Shego's "older sister" feel to her. Lord Drakken and Shego clones, and Doza calling him Daddy, nice touch. It just gets better and better. Betty's emotional conflict driving her obsession with capturing The Pack.
If you aren't eligible for a Fannie award, it isn't because your stories can't compete. I've read a lot of "retail" work that doesn't reach this quality. Keep it up. (Dark Ocean compelled me to register to review, now I have to go read the side stories).
Thanks!

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From immortal7 on October 25, 2007
out of the whole chapter.We had a truely powerful Drakkin. A crushed Shego and so on and the most disturbing thing was the end with the daughters. Keep it up i like disturbing and can't wai to see Kim's response to subject one and the new task force. later
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From Bonniefan on October 23, 2007
You know, I think Doza scares me more than anything else, with all that Mommy talk and then casually shifting to planning to kill Shego just like that. lol

Eagerly awaiting more!
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